考研英语一2011年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

本文将启航教育一对一批改过的2011年考研英语一高分范文进行公开呈现。批改老师对文中每一个失分细节进行了精确标注，对照考研英语写作模板热点话题与评分细则，你可以快速了解考研英语写作的提分方向。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon,there are two tourists,sitting on the board and throwing litter,which environment pollution.Evidently,the cartoon intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, behaviors that harm the environment can erode trust and respect, and cause the loss of opportunities and resources. It can also damage personal image and reputation, leading to exclusion and failure in work and social situations.Not only does it hinder one"s success, but it also acts as an Achilles" heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.What is more, neglecting environmental issues is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth,but also significantly affecting its international image.

How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including

making regulations and behavioral standards. But would these measures be comprehensive enough? In reality,we also need to strengthen self-discipline.With The support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：which

批改：which causes 补充定语从句的谓语

原文：As shown in the cartoon,there are two tourists,sitting on the board and throwing litter,which environment pollution.Evidently,the cartoon intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, behaviors that harm the environment can erode trust and respect, and cause the loss of opportunities and resources. It can also damage personal image and reputation, leading to exclusion and failure in work and social situations.Not only does it hinder one"s success, but it also acts as an Achilles" heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.What is more, neglecting environmental issues is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth,but also significantly affecting its international image.

批改：以分论点的形式论述污染环境的危害性，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including making regulations and behavioral standards. But would these measures be comprehensive enough? In reality,we also need to strengthen self-discipline.With The support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

批改：总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18/20

作文对漫画的理解到位，写作思路紧扣主题，有些短语句式的表达也不错，基本能够传达清楚作者的写作意图，但在以下几方面还需注意：

1.语法：个别句子从汉语角度看意思通顺，仔细分析其实句子成分不完整，不符合英语表达方式。

2.细节：可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

3.内容：这幅漫画中细节比较多，但最核心的内容比较明确，那就是旅游过程中游客的不恰当行为造成环境污染。该图显示水面上有一艘观光船，两个游客随手乱扔垃圾，水面上漂浮着各种各样的废弃物。很多考生拿到试卷后的第一反应就是写如何保护环境，再细心一点的考生就写成如何保护景区环境。可是，这幅图不仅要强调被破坏的环境，还要强调造成这种环境污染的缘由——游客甚至是人类的不恰当行为。这样表达文章意思才全面。

整体来看，作文理解了漫画内涵，段落框架明确，大体上与题目要求保持一致，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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