考研英语一2016年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

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一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

as shown in the left-hand cartoon,there is a father sitting ,smoking and watching television series,while he is educating his children to study hard.in constract,on the right-hand cartoon,there is a father sitting in front of table, focusing himself on working hard,along with his son.the cartoonist intend to convey to the readers that good examples are a catalyst for children"s further development,while negative examples are a shackle that hinders children"s advancement.

the phenomenon is thought-provoking in several aspects,but two of them is particularly significant.On the one hand,good examples set a mode on working ,studying and living,which children are inclined to intimate,enabling them to ignite personal creativity, nurture their souls,cultivate positive behaviors,thereby laying a fundamental stones in children"s futher success.On the one hand,in a modern society,full of changes,chances and challenges,the quality of be unwilling to be ordinary brings tremendous benefits for younger generations.However,negative examples is like a heavy chain that hinders their advancement,depriving their enthusiasm into further bright insights, expressing negative feelings towards lives.

In brief,it is indispensable for us to realize that positive examples impact personal growth and social advancement,from which we all stand to benefit.And we should support and advocate the quality.only by doing so can we build a harmonious society.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：as

批改：大写

原文：in

批改：大写

原文：table

批改：前面要加定冠词 the

原文：himself

批改：多余，应删除

原文：the

批改：大写

原文： intend

批改：要用单三intends

原文：own in the left-hand cartoon,there is a father sitting ,smoking and watching television series,while he is educating his children to study hard.in constract,on the right-hand cartoon,there is a father sitting in front of table, focusing himself on working hard,along with his son.the cartoonist intend to convey to the readers that good examples are a catalyst for children"s further development,while negative examples are a shackle that hinders children"s advancement.

批改：描述漫画内容，表达个人观点，注意语法和大小写

原文：the

批改：大写

原文：is

批改：前面是two，这里要用复数形式are

原文： mode

批改：model

原文：on

批改：介词应该用for

原文：intimate

批改：模仿是imitate

原文：stones

批改：要用单数stone

原文：On the one hand

批改：前面已经用了On the one hand，这里要用On the other hand

原文：be

批改：介词后要用动名词being

原文： futher

批改：further

原文：their enthusiasm into

批改：搭配有误，应该为them of enthusiasm for

原文：omenon is thought-provoking in several aspects,but two of them is particularly significant.On the one hand,good examples set a mode on working ,studying and living,which children are inclined to intimate,enabling them to ignite personal creativity, nurture their souls,cultivate positive behaviors,thereby laying a fundamental stones in children"s futher success.On the one hand,in a modern society,full of changes,chances and challenges,the quality of be unwilling to be ordinary brings tremendous benefits for younger generations.However,negative examples is like a heavy chain that hinders their advancement,depriving their enthusiasm into further bright insights, expressing negative feelings towards lives.

批改：详细论述了正反面榜样对孩子的不同影响，注意语法问题

原文：the quality

批改：表意不明，根据前文，应改为positive examples

原文：only

批改：大写

原文：ief,it is indispensable for us to realize that positive examples impact personal growth and social advancement,from which we all stand to benefit.And we should support and advocate the quality.only by doing so can we build a harmonious society.

批改：表达个人观点，注意语义和大小写

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/20

题目要求：对漫画的描述比较全面，个人观点及论述内容符合题意；

语言表达：全文用了一些经典句式，但语法错误和拼写错误较多，大小写问题也较多，影响了整体表达效果；

行文逻辑：第一段描述题干内容并表达个人观点，第二段给出详细论述，第三段呼应上文总结全文，整体架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；继续多多积累经典句式；提升语法水平；提高单词拼写的准确性；

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