考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语二写作技巧每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2011年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the market proportion of three different cars brands in our country from 2008 to 2009. In 2008 the percentage of domestic brands was approximately 26%, but by 2009, the rate had substantially risen to around 33%.In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a significant decline of about 9% from 2008 to 2009. Simultaneously the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous effort to build a sound manufacturing industry system, enabling factory to manufacture ample high quality"s cars. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s an 2000s are accustomed to using dometic cars and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades . In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands will likely continue decrease and American brands will likely remain relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：cars

批改：cars"

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the market proportion of three different cars brands in our country from 2008 to 2009. In 2008 the percentage of domestic brands was approximately 26%, but by 2009, the rate had substantially risen to around 33%.In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a significant decline of about 9% from 2008 to 2009. Simultaneously the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：reason

批改：复数reasons

原文：high quality"s

批改：high-quality就可以做形容词，表示高质量的

批改：加逗号

原文：dometic

批改：domestic

原文：The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous effort to build a sound manufacturing industry system, enabling factory to manufacture ample high quality"s cars. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s an 2000s are accustomed to using dometic cars and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：continue

批改：后加to

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades . In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands will likely continue decrease and American brands will likely remain relatively stable.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，要注意名词单复数的正确选取；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，一句话只能有一个谓语，因此要恰当使用非谓语。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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