考研英语一2023年大作文实例分析与批改

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一、考研英语一2023年大作文题目

考研英语一2023年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay based on the picture below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2023年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are a lot of people

viewing the Longzhou Competition, and a woman says " It"s good, our village"s Longzhou Competition has become more and more popular. " Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is traditional culture that plays an important role both in our personal development and social progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, studying Chinese traditional cultures can ignite our creativity and nurture our souls, and promote our personal development, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What"s more, promoting Chinese traditional cultures holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for boosting overall national strength, shaping national morals, further propelling social stability and sustainable development.

In brief, Chinese traditional culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and advocate the traditional culture. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential and fulfil our aspirations.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

原文：,

批改：改为 that, 将两句话连接起来

原文：our village"s Longzhou Competition

批改：改为 the Longzhou Competition in our village 会更自然

批改：语法正确

原文：viewing

批改：改为 watching， 是观看动态事件（如比赛、电视、电影）最常用、最标准的动词。

批改：语法正确

原文：,

批改：改为 and 连接

原文：Chinese traditional cultures

批改：改为 traditional Chinese culture 会让表达更加地道和自然。

原文：Chinese traditional cultures

批改：可改为 traditional Chinese culture 更地道自然

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文：Chinese traditional

批改：改为 traditional Chinese

原文：the

批改：建议删去

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合，但是主题词改为 cultural inheritance 文化传承会更精确

语言表达：存在几处细节表达问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 细节表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心 2. 主题词尽量按最精确的表达。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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