考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一大作文每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2017年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy,Sitting at chair and saying that i have a lots of books, On the contrary, in the right-hand there is a boy ,Sitting at the chair in front of the table,and saying that “I will read finish 20 boos in this year”.

Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future, while daydream is the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them areparticularly significant. First and foremost being practical can ignite our creativity our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self consuming. What is more, In modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, being practical has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and itssignificance has become increasingly evident.

In brief, being practical is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we allstand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice additionally, we must beacutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydream to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Sitting

批改：此处首字母不大写

原文：i

批改：首字母大写

原文：a lots of

批改：是 a lot of 或者 lots of

原文：,

批改：此处为句号

原文：at chair

批改：此处缺少冠词，且改为 in a chair 最地道

原文：right-hand

批改：此处为名词短语，改为 right-hand cartoon, 记得加逗号

原文：Sitting

批改：此处首字母不大写

原文：finish

批改：两个谓语动词不能连用，删去

原文：boos

批改：books

原文：in

批改：this year 前面不加介词，删去 in

原文：daydream

批改：动词原形不能作主语，改为 daydreaming

批改：此处建议和上一段写为一段，内容表达不错，主题词也是切题的，多注意语法问题

原文：areparticularly

批改：两个单词之间加空格

原文：foremost

批改：加逗号

原文：our

批改：此处要加连接词，改为 and our

原文：self consuming

批改：中间要加连字符

原文：In

批改：此处首字母不大写

原文：itssignificance

批改：两个单词之间加空格

批改：内容表达不错，也很具体

原文：allstand

批改：两个单词之间加空格

原文： practice

批改：加句号

原文：additionally

批改：首字母大写

原文：beacutely

批改：两个单词之间加空格

原文：daydream

批改：介词后面加动词的 ing 形式，改为 daydreaming

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：内容比较丰富具体，结构上建议写为三段式

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心 2. 标点，空格使用和首字母大小写要规范。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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