2021年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

2021年考研英语二大作文是启航考研英语备考清单中的必练题型。本文带来的高分批改范例，配套启航教育老师的逐句批注与预测话题标签，适合考研英语考生在冲刺阶段精读精练，是一套完整的写作提升资料。

一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

This is a column chart that clearly illustrates the striking contrasts in the way of a certain city"s residents" exercise in a certain city. Overall, exercise alone has the largest proportion of residents, at 54.3%. The next are exercise with friends or family, at 44% and 23%, respectively. Finally come team activities, at 15%.

Such statistics can be associated with the popularity of exercise among residents in the city, but what results in this phenomenon? For one thing, living in urban areas, most residents are characterized by high stress, which makes exercise the first choice. For another, compared to team activities, exercise with friends or family can bring more happiness, so a large proportion of residents do not go for team activities.

As a student, I deem that it is necessary for us to exercise with friends, as it will bring us well - being, arouse our passion for life, and help us keep healthy.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：a certain city"s residents" exercise

批改： 修饰词堆叠太多，结构冗长，改为 physical exercise among the residents

原文：The next are

批改：典型的中式英语，语法错误，be 动词 和实义动词 exercise 不能同时出现，改为 This is followed by exercising with friends and families at 47.7% and 23.9%, respectively.

原文：Such statistics can be associated with the popularity of exercise among residents in the city, but what results in this phenomenon? For one thing, living in urban areas, most residents are characterized by high stress, which makes exercise the first choice. For another, compared to team activities, exercise with friends or family can bring more happiness, so a large proportion of residents do not go for team activities.

批改：原因分析段的重点有点偏离，没有重点分析运动方式的选择，应该选择占比最大的一至两个元素进行剖析。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12 /15

从结构层面看，本文脉络清晰，采用三段式写作，开头清楚表明图片，中间进行了分析，最后做出了总结；

从内容层面看，有一个很大的问题是字数偏少，原因分析段可选择占比最大的一至两个元素进行剖析。

从语言层面看，语法上注意不能两个动词相连。

建议：多积累语法知识，锻炼方式占比不同，尤其独自锻炼占比最大的原因可以从国家政策和个人压力方面展开说说，加油吧！

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