考研英语一2011年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

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一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the picture, there are two tourists sitting in a boat and enjoying landscape, which throws garbage into the river and cause pollution. Evidently,the picture intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, neglecting environmental pollution is like a heavy chain that hinder our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image. What is more, behaviors that harm the environment can cause the loss of opportunities and resources. It can also damage personal image and reputation, leading to exclusion,and failure in work and social situations.

How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggest by many that we need a package deal, including enhancing supervision and issuing related regulations. But would these measures be comprehensive enough ? In reality, we also need to strengthen the guiding role of the media in public opinion. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：which

批改：who

原文：s shown in the picture, there are two tourists sitting in a boat and enjoying landscape, which throws garbage into the river and cause pollution. Evidently,the picture intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：hinder

批改：hinders

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, neglecting environmental pollution is like a heavy chain that hinder our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image. What is more, behaviors that harm the environment can cause the loss of opportunities and resources. It can also damage personal image and reputation, leading to exclusion,and failure in work and social situations.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggest by many that we need a package deal, including enhancing supervision and issuing related regulations. But would these measures be comprehensive enough ? In reality, we also need to strengthen the guiding role of the media in public opinion. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意定语从句关系词的正确选取以及主谓一致问题。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

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