考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大,一直是2010年考研英语一备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语一真题话题,给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文,文中不仅有逐句批注,还附有可复制的考研英语一高分写作模板。
一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目
考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文
As shown in the cartoon, there is a hotpot mixing with different cultural elements, which contains Kung Fu, post-modern, the goose lake and so on. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is cultural communications that play an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.
This cartoon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, cultural communications and learning about different cultures can nuture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What"s more, cultural communications holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it promotes our international relationships with other nations and helps us know about other nations better.
In brief, cultural communications is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. By doing so we can make our world shine with renewed brilliance.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:the goose lake
批改:地名,实词首字母大写
原文:it is cultural communications that play
批改:主谓不一致,“cultural communications” 视为单数概念,应改为 “it is cultural communications that plays”
原文:cultural communications holds
批改:改为 “hold”(复数主语对应复数谓语)
原文:As shown in the cartoon, there is a hotpot mixing with different cultural elements, which contains Kung Fu, post-modern, the goose lake and so on. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is cultural communications that play an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.
批改:描述图片内容,符合题目要求
原文:This cartoon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, cultural communications and learning about different cultures can nuture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What"s more, cultural communications holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it promotes our international relationships with other nations and helps us know about other nations better.
批改:提出了自己的观点,有明显的逻辑词,条理清晰
原文:In brief, cultural communications is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. By doing so we can make our world shine with renewed brilliance.
批改:结尾段内容结构完整
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:16
这篇漫画分析文围绕 “文化融合” 主题展开,主题明确,逻辑链条清晰,态度积极正向。但在细节表达、语法精准度上仍有优化空间。写完作文整体检查一下主谓一致这类细节问题,希望继续努力,加油!
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