考研英语二2011年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2011年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the rate of different domestic automobile brands" market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 26%, but by 2009, this rate had risen to around 33%. In contrast, the percentage of Japan"s brands experienced a decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by manufacturing industry of Chinese automobile in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic automobiles will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of overseals brands of automobiles will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：rate

批改：表达不太符合英文习惯，这里应改为market share

原文：" market

批改：多余，应删除

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the rate of different domestic automobile brands" market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 26%, but by 2009, this rate had risen to around 33%. In contrast, the percentage of Japan"s brands experienced a decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

批改：对图标的描述较为全面，注意个别英文表达

原文：manufacturing industry of Chinese automobile

批改：改为 China"s automobile manufacturing industry更符合英文表达习惯

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by manufacturing industry of Chinese automobile in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：从消费者偏好和行业发展两个角度论证国产汽车占比 上升的原因，注意个别英文表达

原文：overseals

批改：overseas

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic automobiles will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of overseals brands of automobiles will likely continue to decrease.

批改：表达个人观点，注意拼写问题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

题目要求：对图表内容表述清晰，个人观点及论述内容符合题意；

语言表达：全文用了较多的范文原句，但也有少量语法和拼写问题，表达上还有提升的空间。如果目前还不能准确使用例句，也可以尝试用自己的语言表达，锻炼下语法水平；

行文逻辑：第一段描述题干内容，第二段给出详细论述，第三段表达观点，架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；继续多多积累经典句式；加强语法练习

这篇完成得比较好，继续加油啊~

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