2021年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2021年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二写作冲刺教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the different exercise ways of the residents in a certain city. Exercising oneself takes the lead at 54%, followed by exercising with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, factors such as exercising with family members and team activities can also considered accounting for 23.9%, 15.8% respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes,"On the life stage, pressure is always present."Nowadays, resident are compelled to confront immense life pressure, and as a result, exercising oneself has emerged as their first choice for utilizing leisure time. In addition, As the conductor of orchestrating the symphony changes our government some has made tremendous efforts to build looked useful parks. enabling them to exercise with friends and family members.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statisical accurately and. truthfully reflect the choice of resident. serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era. and will likely remain relatively stable in the following

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：oneself

批改：改成副词修饰前面的动词exercising，改成alone独自

批改：加逗号断句

原文：The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the different exercise ways of the residents in a certain city. Exercising oneself takes the lead at 54%, followed by exercising with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, factors such as exercising with family members and team activities can also considered accounting for 23.9%, 15.8% respectively.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：resident

批改：复数

原文：oneself

批改：alone

原文：As

批改：逗号后单词小写

原文：of

批改：去掉

批改：加of

批改：加逗号

原文：some has made

批改：has made some

原文：looked

批改：去掉

批改：逗号断句

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes,"On the life stage, pressure is always present."Nowadays, resident are compelled to confront immense life pressure, and as a result, exercising oneself has emerged as their first choice for utilizing leisure time. In addition, As the conductor of orchestrating the symphony changes our government some has made tremendous efforts to build looked useful parks. enabling them to exercise with friends and family members.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词对图表中的现象进行分析论述，注意避免小的语言错误。

批改：加figures

原文：resident

批改：复数

批改：逗号

批改：逗号

原文：following

批改：后加decades

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statisical accurately and. truthfully reflect the choice of resident. serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era. and will likely remain relatively stable in the following

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，注意区分词性及其用法，名词单复数要使用正确；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意正确使用标点断句；语法方面，注意句子结构和内容的完整。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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