考研英语一2016年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一大作文每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2016年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a father, smoking and watching TV, while demanding his son to study hard. On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, the father is studying hard together with his son. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that positive examples are the brush that paints a bright future for children, while negative examples are the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, parents who set a positive example can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, those negative examples set by parents are like a heavy chain that hinders children"s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, positive examples are the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of negative examples to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a father, smoking and watching TV, while demanding his son to study hard. On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, the father is studying hard together with his son. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that positive examples are the brush that paints a bright future for children, while negative examples are the shackle that hinders progress.

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, parents who set a positive example can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, those negative examples set by parents are like a heavy chain that hinders children"s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

批改：以分论点的形式论述建立好榜样的重要性，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：In brief, positive examples are the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of negative examples to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：19/20

作文对漫画的理解到位，写作思路紧扣主题，有些短语句式的表达也不错，基本能够传达清楚作者的写作意图.

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：第一段为传统的图画描述段，根据图画中的具体信息，尤其是下面的文字说明，进行直接描述。第二段以分论点的形式阐释图画寓意，父母言传身教的重要性，逻辑严谨，层次分明。最后一段表明作者本人对言传身教建立榜样的态度或看法，此评论部分可以提出建议，考虑背景及原因，或描述未来。

整体来看，没有细节错误，但要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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