距离2027考研英语初试已不足一年,写作冲刺阶段高效的复习方式就是精研历年真题高分范文。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例,紧扣考研英语二作文真题写作锦囊要点,全文结构严谨、表达地道,适合所有2027考生。
一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic cars was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards domestic cars have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of people choose domestic cars rather than foreign cars. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s automotive industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of foreign cars will likely continue to decrease relatively.
三、考研英语作文批改
批改:语法正确
批改:语法正确
批改:语法正确
批改:开头段表达不错,清晰地阐述了图表内容
批改:语法正确
批改:语法正确
原文:foreign
批改:改为 imported 更地道
批改:语法正确
批改:语法正确,表达也不错
批改:内容表达很好,也很具体
批改:语法正确
原文:foreign
批改:此处可以写得更具体一点,直接对应图表,改为 Japanese and American
批改:结尾段内容表达不错
原文:relatively
批改:删去,"relatively" 是一个需要比较基准的词,在表示 相对于什么在减少的情况下,用它是合适的,此处并未表示 相对于什么 在减少
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:12分/ 15分
题目要求:总体上来说是切题的,表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的
语言表达:存在几处细节表达问题,词汇表达不错,一些句式表达也很好
结构逻辑:文章的结构完整清晰,内容也比较丰富具体
修改建议:细节表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改,要细心,之后可以多积累素材,自己多练练句子,进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备,试着多用自己的话来写,总的来说写的不错,加油!
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