考研英语一2010年大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2010年考研英语一大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目

考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文

The title of the drawing is "Cultural hot pot, Delicious and nutritious. And it vividly describes that a host of cultural elements which stem from all over the world are integrated into the hot pot such as Shakespeare, kungfu and ceremony.

What the subject of this drawing is exceedly meaningful and significant. With the rapid development of the process of the globalization, the input and the output of the culture increase so much that propel the reform of countries in cultural situation. However, the another culture, whatever it comes from, has both the positive and the negative aspects. Thus, there is a hot pot only putting the positive elements which means selecting the essence and discarding the 7 gross. Moreover, we will eat this "delicious and nutritious pot after sifting from various countries that we will gain the physical and mental healthy in the most extent.

In my opinion, the enlightenment of this drawing is that when you face other culture, make a distinguishment from right to wrong and enjoy the excellent core as if ning the meat in hot pot. Nonetheless，one is simply not enough to enhance ourself, learning a variety of coutries and taking in their positive sector are crucial.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The title of the drawing is "Cultural hot pot, Delicious and nutritious. And it vividly describes that a host of cultural elements which stem from all over the world are integrated into the hot pot such as Shakespeare, kungfu and ceremony.

批改：能够清晰全面的描绘出图画中展示的内容

原文：What

批改：what多余，去掉

原文：exceedly

批改：exceedingly

原文：e input and the output of the culture increase so much that propel the reform of countries in cultural situation.

批改：正确表达为：Cultural input and output have increased so much that they propel the reform of countries in the cultural field.

原文：7

批改：删去

原文：we will eat this "delicious and nutritious pot after sifting from various countries that we will gain the physical and mental healthy in the most extent.

批改：这句话存在语法错误、搭配不当和语义逻辑混乱的问题。建议改成：We will eat the delicious and nutritious food in this pot， which has been selected from various options around the world，and this will help us improve our physical and mental health to the greatest extent.

原文：t the subject of this drawing is exceedly meaningful and significant. With the rapid development of the process of the globalization, the input and the output of the culture increase so much that propel the reform of countries in cultural situation. However, the another culture, whatever it comes from, has both the positive and the negative aspects. Thus, there is a hot pot only putting the positive elements which means selecting the essence and discarding the 7 gross. Moreover, we will eat this "delicious and nutritious pot after sifting from various countries that we will gain the physical and mental healthy in the most extent

批改：注意句子的语法问题和表达逻辑问题

原文：culture

批改：cultures复数

原文：make a distinguishment

批改：缺少主语，改成：you should distinguish

原文：ning

批改：rinsing？

原文：Nonetheless，one is simply not enough to enhance ourself, learning a variety of coutries and taking in their positive sector are crucial.

批改：这句话存在语法错误、词汇拼写 、搭配问题和人称逻辑不一致的问题，改成：Nonetheless, this alone is not enough to enhance ourselves; learning about the cultures of a variety of countries and absorbing their positive elements are crucial.

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/20

论述的内容全面，字数符合作文的要求，值得表扬，希望能够注意以下的小错误。

内容上：符合题目要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图画中的内容。

词汇上：基础词汇要避免拼写错误，注意单复数正确；

句式上：基础句式结构要确保语法和逻辑无误；

语法上：注意从句的正确使用。

逻辑上：结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

修改建议：可以看出作文的内容还是比较全面的，值得表扬。但是需要细心一些，注意避免以上提出的细节错误。继续加油，再接再厉。

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