考研英语一2011年大作文怎么写？附例文批改

思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向，本文呈现的2011年考研英语一批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面，逐段展示了一篇考研英语作文真题范文高分范文的诞生过程。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon. there are a couple of people boating on the water and enjoying the scenery, and littering into the water. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, environmental protection holds exceptional significance for a nation. as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for safeguarding public health, further propelling social stability and sustainable development. What is more, environmental pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image.

How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including enhancing supervision and strengthening the guiding role of the media in public opinion. But would these measures be comprehensive enough! In reality, we also need to foster the quality of environmental protection deliberately. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：As shown in the cartoon. there are a couple of people boating on the water and enjoying the scenery, and littering into the water. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, environmental protection holds exceptional significance for a nation. as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for safeguarding public health, further propelling social stability and sustainable development. What is more, environmental pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image.

批改：以分论点的形式论述污染环境的危害，逻辑严谨，层次分明。。

原文：!

批改：改为问号 注意标点格式规范

原文：How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including enhancing supervision and strengthening the guiding role of the media in public opinion. But would these measures be comprehensive enough! In reality, we also need to foster the quality of environmental protection deliberately. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：19/20

作文对漫画的理解到位，写作思路紧扣主题，有些短语句式的表达也不错，基本能够传达清楚作者的写作意图，但在以下几方面还需注意：

1.语法：个别句子从汉语角度看意思通顺，仔细分析其实句子成分不完整，不符合英语表达方式。

2.细节：作文中有几处比较明显的拼写错误。考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

3.内容：这幅漫画中细节比较多，但最核心的内容比较明确，那就是旅游过程中游客的不恰当行为造成环境污染。该图显示水面上有一艘观光船，两个游客随手乱扔垃圾，水面上漂浮着各种各样的废弃物。很多考生拿到试卷后的第一反应就是写如何保护环境，再细心一点的考生就写成如何保护景区环境。可是，这幅图不仅要强调被破坏的环境，还要强调造成这种环境污染的缘由——游客甚至是人类的不恰当行为。这样表达文章意思才全面。

整体来看，没有细节错误，但要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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