据启航教育英语教研组统计,考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2019年考研英语二批改例文中,考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达,获得高分,其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。
一、2019年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2019年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2019年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depects various choices of graduates at a certain university in 2013 and 2018. In 2013, the percentage of graduates who chose employment was 68.1%, but by 2018,this rate had substantially decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of graduates who chose to continue learning and start own business experenced a increase of 7.7% and 1.3%, respectively ,during the same period.
The core reasons for the obseved phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system,enabling graduates to have ample opportunities for further education. In addition, as the saying goes, on life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowdays, gtaduates are compelled to confront immense employment pressure,and as a result, continuing learning has emerged as their significant choice. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
what about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of graduates who choose to continue learning and start own business will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of graduates who choose employment will likely continue to decrease.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:depects
批改:depicts
原文:experenced
批改:experienced
原文:a
批改:an
原文:The bar chart clearly depects various choices of graduates at a certain university in 2013 and 2018. In 2013, the percentage of graduates who chose employment was 68.1%, but by 2018,this rate had substantially decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of graduates who chose to continue learning and start own business experenced a increase of 7.7% and 1.3%, respectively ,during the same period.
批改:能够完整地描绘出图表的信息,句子连贯。
原文:obseved
批改:observed
原文:he core reasons for the obseved phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system,enabling graduates to have ample opportunities for further education. In addition, as the saying goes, on life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowdays, gtaduates are compelled to confront immense employment pressure,and as a result, continuing learning has emerged as their significant choice. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
批改:能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义,能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子,使得句与句之间衔接连贯,望继续保持。
原文:what
批改:首字母大写
原文:what about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of graduates who choose to continue learning and start own business will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of graduates who choose employment will likely continue to decrease.
批改:能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:12/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误,元音开头的单词前用an修饰;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变;语法方面,总体来看语法基础没有问题。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的很认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。一定要细心一些,注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
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