2014年考研英语二大作文怎么写？附例文批改

想在短时间内显著提升考研英语写作分数？研读高分范文并接受专业批改是高效的路径。本文整理的2014年考研英语二批改范例，从图表描述、原因分析到建议评论，每一段都渗透着考研英语写作锦囊热点话题的得分要点。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

As is a subtly decipted in the above bar chart, there is a series of figures demonstration the changing of urban population and rural population during 20 years in china. To be specific, the number of rural population declined from 834 million to 807 million in 1990 to 2000. As a sharp contrast, the numer of urban population growth from 300 million to 458 milion during the same period. And the numbe of rural population rapidly decrease from 800mihion to 674 million during the 2000 to 2010. What"s more, the number of urban population jump from 458 million to 666million in 2000 to 2010.

Numerous reasons can be given, but these will suffice. To begin with, with china"s market-origened economy developing at an accelerating rate, the living standard improved considerably, and therefore a growng number of people choose to living in the urban instead of living in the rural. In addition, the betterment of policies from the govenment has offered people more efficient and available channels in going to urban to live. Last but not least, the shift attitudes toward life aamong chinese is also a reason which cannot be easily escaped.

Judging from current situation, it can be boldly predicted that the established trend is bound to continue for a certain period of time in the forthcoming years.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：a

批改：删去a，“As is subtly depicted” 为正确结构

原文：decipted

批改：拼写错误 decipted→depicted

原文：demonstration

批改：词性错误，应该是动名词形式 demonstration→demonstrating

原文： china

批改：China首字母大写

批改：As is subtly depicted in the above bar chart, a series of figures demonstrates the changes in China’s urban and rural populations over the 20-year period (1990-2010).可以参考这个句子

原文： numer

批改：拼写错误 numer→number

原文： growt

批改：growth→grew，用动词作谓语

原文： milion

批改：拼写错误milion→million

原文：numbe

批改：numbe→number

原文： decrease

批改：decrease→decreased，描述过去数据用一般过去时

原文： jump

批改：jump→jumped，描述过去数据用一般过去时

原文：in 1990 to 2000

批改：from 1990 to 2000 表示从...到...

原文：in 2000 to 2010

批改：from 2000 to 2010

原文：mihion

批改：million注意拼写

原文：during the 2000 to 2010

批改：from 2000 to 2010 注意从哪个时间到哪个时间用的是 from...to...

原文：. And the numbe of rural population rapidly decrease from 800mihion to 674 million during the 2000 to 2010. What"s more, the number of urban population jump from 458 million to 666million in 2000 to 201

批改：Furthermore, the rural population decreased rapidly from 800 million to 674 million from 2000 to 2010. What’s more, the urban population jumped from 458 million to 666 million over the same period. 可以参考这个句子

批改：优点：能按“1990-2000”“2000-2010” 两个时间段拆分数据，清晰对比城乡人口“一降一升”的趋势，且包含核心数据，基本完成“interpret the chart”的任务。 不足：拼写错误密集（decipted、numer、mihion 等），数据描述的介词搭配混乱（in/from 混用），细节错误突出，影响信息传递效率。

原文：china"s

批改：china→China

原文：market-origened

批改：market-origened→market-oriented

原文：growng

批改：growng→growing

原文：choose to living i

批改：语法错误，choose to living→choose to live，“to” 后接动词原形

原文：the urban

批改：the urban/the rural→urban areas/rural areas，“urban/rural” 为形容词，需搭配名词 “areas”

原文： govenment

批改：拼写错误，govenment→government

原文：channels in going to urban

批改：搭配错误，channels in going→channels to move，“提供…… 的渠道” 用“channels to do”；urban→urban areas）

原文：aamong

批改：拼写错误，aamong→among

原文：chinese

批改：chinese→Chinese

原文：the shift attitudes toward life aamong chinese is

批改：语法错误，shift attitudes→shift in attitudes，“态度的转变”需加“in”；is→are，“attitudes”为复数，谓语用 are

原文：cannot be easily escaped

批改：cannot be easily escaped→cannot be ignored，“不可忽视” 更贴合语义。参考：the shift in Chinese people’s attitudes toward life is also a reason that cannot be ignored.

批改：优点：用“To begin with”“In addition”“Last but not least”搭建三层逻辑，从“经济发展”“政策支持”“态度转变”三个角度分析城乡人口变化，论点覆盖全面。 不足：存在基础拼写错误和搭配错误；部分表达生硬，用词不规范，削弱了语言专业性。

批改：紧扣要求提出未来趋势（“趋势将持续”），句子简洁，观点明确，完成了结尾的总结功能

批改：建议可以加一个the表示特指

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15分

覆盖“解读图表”和“给出评论”两大任务，图表数据提取完整，原因分析角度全面，趋势预测明确，但数据描述的准确性（介词、时态）和语言的规范性（拼写、搭配）有待提升。核心问题集中在“基础错误”，如拼写错误（高频词如 government、million）、语法错误（时态、介词搭配）、表达冗余/生硬，虽未严重影响整体理解，但不符合考研书面语“准确、简洁、专业”的要求；句式以简单句为主，缺乏复杂句式（如定语从句、状语从句）的灵活运用。

提升建议：优先“减少基础错误”：一是整理高频拼写词（government、million、urban、rural）和介词搭配（from...to...、over the period）；二是优化冗余表达（如 “the rural population” 替代 “the number of rural population”）；三是积累图表作文常用逻辑词（By sharp contrast、Furthermore、As a result），强化句子间连贯性。同时，可加入“城乡人口变化反映城市化进程”的总结，让原因分析与图表趋势更紧密关联。

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