2021年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语二写作冲刺每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2021年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the residents" ways of exercising in a certain city. Exercising alone takes the lead at 54.3%, followed by exercising with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, factors such as exercising with family members and group activities are also considered, accounting for 23.9% and 15.8%. The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.

To start with, as we all know, the outbreak of Covid-19 has impacted almost every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choices. Consequently, an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to "social distance". This explains why people are choosing to exercise alone. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, more and more people are compelled to confront social pressure, and as a result, having a leisure time without other people has emerged as their significant choice. Considering these factors, the observed phenomenon is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I"m confident that the statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of people, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：建议此处写为开头段，表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：建议写为第二段的开头句

原文：Covid

批改：此处都要大写 COVID

批改：语法正确，内容表达也很好

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

批改：语法正确，结尾段内容表达也很好

原文：a

批改：删去，leisure time 通常作为不可数名词

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处细节表达问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：细节表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心 2. 字母大小写要规范，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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