2011年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

本文整理了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语作文真题范文的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of some brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic cars was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously ,the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to improve the quality of domestic cars and reduce their prices, enabling choose them more willingly. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China’s automotive industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American brands will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

原文：enabling

批改：改为 enabling people to 此处要表达完整，固定搭配 enable sb to do sth.

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，句子表达也很好

批改：内容表达很好，很充分，用词和句式也很好

批改：语法正确

批改：结尾段内容也很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，理由的分析与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在一处语法错误，词汇表达不错，句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体，论证也很充分

修改建议：语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，尽量多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的很好，加油！

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