2014年考研英语二大作文实例分析与批改

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一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the change in China"s urban and rural residents numbers from 1990 to 2010. In 1990, the urban residents was 300 million, but by 2000, this rate risen to around 158 million, by 2010, the urban residents gratully risen to 666 million. In contrast, rural residents droped year by year during the same period.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system in cities. enabling rural resident to have ample opportunities to find jobs in cities.In addition, society is developing at a high speed. rural residents are no longer content with mere material satisfaction they also pursue a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of them choose to live in cities. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I think the urban population will increase steadily in the coming dlecades. In contrast, the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the change in China"s urban and rural residents numbers

批改：改为 the change of the number of urban and rural residents in China

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the change in China"s urban and rural residents numbers from 1990 to 2010.

批改：首句概括图表内容也可以说 “The bar chart highlights the change of urban and rural population in 1990 and 2010.”

原文：risen

批改：改为 had risen

原文：to

批改：这里要用 rise by... “增长了...”

原文：gratully

批改：正确写法为 gradually

原文：the urban residents

批改：也可以说 the number of urban residents 或 urban population

原文：risen

批改：改为 had risen

原文：droped

批改：正确写法为 dropped

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the change in China"s urban and rural residents numbers from 1990 to 2010. In 1990, the urban residents was 300 million, but by 2000, this rate risen to around 158 million, by 2010, the urban residents gratully risen to 666 million. In contrast, rural residents droped year by year during the same period.

批改：描述图表中的变化及相互关系时，一是表达可以尽量灵活，“人口”就可以用如residents/population等表类似含义的词替换；二是多积累表变化的动词、形容词、副词，也可以灵活转换词性，像increase/decline就既可以作名词又可作动词，掌握一个词的多种用法会有利于让表达更自如；三表对比关系还可以用while，如 "The number of urban residents had surged from 300 million to 666 million during the past two decades while residents in rural areas had significantly decreased by 160 million at the same time."

原文：goverment

批改：正确写法为 government

批改：改为逗号

原文：resident

批改：改为 residents

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system in cities. enabling rural resident to have ample opportunities to find jobs in cities.In addition, society is developing at a high speed. rural residents are no longer content with mere material satisfaction they also pursue a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of them choose to live in cities. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：本段分析了产生图中现象的原因，就业这一角度把握的很好，建议先从图中的变化提取出观点”城镇人口不断增加，乡村人口不断减少“，再以“国家——企业——个人”的逻辑展开，如：1.就业和人才政策完善，人才福利多，鼓励更多人前往大城市发展；2.城市交通便利、资源丰富、消费需求旺盛等优势吸引更多企业入驻，也为人们从农村迁往城市寻求更多就业机会提供了契机；3.从个人衣食住行方面来说，城市服务水平较高，可以满足人们日益增长的各项需求

原文：dlecades

批改：正确写法为 decades

原文：likely

批改：删去

原文：What about future trends? I think the urban population will increase steadily in the coming dlecades. In contrast, the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease.

批改：结尾进行了预测，未来城镇人口将继续增加

原文：society is developing at a high speed

批改：可以改为 with the rapid growth of economy

批改：改为逗号

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：7/15

1）内容上：描述了图表内容，但分析原因的角度不够全面；

2）语言上：表达可以更灵活一些，词汇驾驭和句子组织有待加强；

3）结构上：有意识地使用衔接词，但论述缺乏逻辑；

4）学习建议：

文中主要围绕”城镇人口增加，乡村人口减少“这一趋势，分析“为什么”会产生这一变化，可以从“国家发展、城乡变迁和人们衣食住行”等角度展开论述逻辑。一是内容上可以举出具体例子如“大城市交通便利、基础设施完善、服务水平较高、就业机会多，促使城市人口增加”，最好把这些逻辑都串联起来，分点逐条阐述；二是表达上要尽量简洁、灵活，多用转述、同义替换，先把基础的句子架构组织起来，再尝试拓展更多句型句式，之后多复盘总结图表类作文常用表达，继续加油！

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