2014年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2014年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the charges in urban and rural populations from 1990 to 2010 in China.In 1990,the number of urban populations was 300 million,but by 2010,the figure had substantially risen to 666 million.In contrast,the number of rural populations experienced a slow decline of 160 million during the same period.

The core reason for the obversed phenomenon can be summrized as follows.To start with,in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,people are on longer content with mere material satisfaction,they also pursue spiritual enjoyment.This explains why the number of urban populations had increased.In addition,as the conductor orcjestarting the symphony of changes,our government has made termendous efforts to build a sound development system,enable rural residents to have ample opportunity for improving level of life.Considering those factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trend?I am confident that the number of urban populations will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast,the number of rural populations will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the charges in urban and rural populations from 1990 to 2010 in China.

批改：表达柱状图清晰展示了中国1990 - 2010年城乡人口的变化，但“charges”用词错误，应是“changes”。

原文：In 1990,the number of urban populations was 300 million,but by 2010,the figure had substantially risen to 666 million.

批改：准确描述了1990 - 2010年城市人口数量的变化情况，表述清晰。

原文：n contrast,the number of rural populations experienced a slow decline of 160 million during the same period.

批改：清晰说明了同期农村人口数量的缓慢下降情况

原文：The core reason for the obversed phenomenon can be summrized as follows.

批改：“obversed”拼写错误，应为“observed”；“summrized”拼写错误，应为“summarized”

原文：To start with,in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,people are on longer content with mere material satisfaction,they also pursue spiritual enjoyment.

批改：阐述原因时，想表达随着社会的高速发展，人们不再满足于单纯的物质满足，还追求精神享受，但“on longer”表述错误，应为“no longer”。

原文：This explains why the number of urban populations had increased.

批改：说明这就是城市人口数量增加的原因，逻辑合理

原文：In addition,as the conductor orcjestarting the symphony of changes,our government has made termendous efforts to build a sound development system,enable rural residents to have ample opportunity for improving level of life.

批改：想表达政府作为推动变化的“指挥者”做出了巨大努力，但存在多处错误。“conductor orcjestarting”表述混乱且拼写错误，应是“conductor orchestrating”；“termendous”拼写错误，应为“tremendous”

原文：Considering those factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：基于前面阐述的原因，得出图表中现象不足为奇的结论，逻辑合理。

原文：What about future trend?I am confident that the number of urban populations will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：提出对未来趋势的疑问并表达对城市人口数量稳定增长的信心，表述清晰。

原文：In contrast,the number of rural populations will likely continue to decrease.

批改：与前面城市人口增长形成对比，说明农村人口数量可能继续减少，逻辑合理。

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the charges in urban and rural populations from 1990 to 2010 in China.In 1990,the number of urban populations was 300 million,but by 2010,the figure had substantially risen to 666 million.In contrast,the number of rural populations experienced a slow decline of 160 million during the same period.

批改：成功描述了图表中1990 - 2010年中国城乡人口数量的变化情况，但存在用词和表述上的小问题。

原文：The core reason for the obversed phenomenon can be summrized as follows.To start with,in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,people are on longer content with mere material satisfaction,they also pursue spiritual enjoyment.This explains why the number of urban populations had increased.In addition,as the conductor orcjestarting the symphony of changes,our government has made termendous efforts to build a sound development system,enable rural residents to have ample opportunity for improving level of life.Considering those factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：尝试分析图表现象的原因，但存在较多拼写，句子结构方面的问题，影响了观点的表达。

原文：What about future trend?I am confident that the number of urban populations will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast,the number of rural populations will likely continue to decrease.

批改：对未来城乡人口数量变化趋势进行了合理预测，表述简洁明了。

原文：r of urban

批改： 指某一地区 / 群体的总人口是整体概念用单数，population去掉s, 后面rural population 也是

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：7/15

题目要求：对图表数据进行了较为清晰的呈现，分析了导致城乡人口变化的原因，并对未来趋势进行了预测，符合题目要求。

语言表达：整体采用了“描述图表 - 分析原因 - 预测趋势”的结构，层次分明.

内容层面：指出社会的高速发展使人们不再满足于物质满足，追求精神享受，从而导致城市人口增加，以及政府努力构建良好的发展体系，使农村居民有更多机会提高生活水平。

修改建议：仔细检查单词的拼写。加油！

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