2014年考研英语二大作文实例分析与批改

想在考研英语二大作文中写出有深度的论证段落？本文精解的2014年考研英语二真题范文，从论据选择、过渡句使用到结尾点题都极具参考价值。启航教育考研英语教研组对该篇范文的批注，有助于考生建立完善的写作逻辑。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the population changing between China"s urban areas and rural areas over 20 years. In 1990, the number of the urban population was 300 million, but in 2010, the figure had risen to about 650 million. In contrast, the number of rural population experienced a decline of about 150 million during the same time. The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.

To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and enrich people, allowing them to move to urban areas that were previously deemed the places for rich people to live in. In addition, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, chances, it is urban areas that have more opportunities for long term development. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I"m confident that the figure of urban population is a clear sign of social improvement and will likely continue to increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the population changing between China"s urban areas and rural areas

批改：改为 the changes in urban and rural populations in China 更合适

原文：the

批改：删去

原文：650

批改：图表数字已经标出来了，直接写为 666

原文：about 150

批改：此处可直接计算，即 160

批改：此处写为开头段，表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容，注意数字表达的准确性

批改：此处写为第二句的开头

原文：,

批改：此处改为 and

原文：enrich people

批改：改为 enrich people"s lives

原文： long term

批改：记得加连字符，改为 long-term

批改：内容表达不错，也比较具体

原文：figure

批改：改为 number

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 数字表达要精确，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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