考研英语二2016年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2016年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二写作技巧话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purposes of traveling among students at certain university. Admiring scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by reducing pressure at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making friends, fostering ability of independence, and other purposes are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6%, and 15%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a harmonious ecological system, enabling university students to have an intimate connection with nature through travel. In addition, as the saying goes, “On life’s stage, pressure is always present.” Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the thoughts of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：certain university

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 a certain university

批改：头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：语法正确

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

批改：语法正确，结尾段表达也很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在一处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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