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一、2021年考研英语一大作文题目
考研英语一2021年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should1)describe the picture briefly, 2)interpret the implied meaning, and 3)give your comments. Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、2021年考研英语一大作文批改例文
As shown in the cartoon, there is a boy, dressing a costume and feeling sad because his classmates don"t like his hobby, while his father encourages his son:" You like it. That"s enough." Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that confidence is the brush that paints a bright future, while lack of confidence is the shackle that hinders progress.
This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, neglecting confidence is like a heavy chain that hinders children’s progress, depriving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society. What"s more, in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, confidence has become a key quality that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident.
In brief, confidence is the catalyst for societal and personal development , from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:As shown in the cartoon, there is a boy, dressing a costume and feeling sad because his classmates don"t like his hobby, while his father encourages his son:" You like it. That"s enough." Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that confidence is the brush that paints a bright future, while lack of confidence is the shackle that hinders progress.
批改:准确概括了漫画内容及其寓意
原文:dressing
批改:dressed in
原文:This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, neglecting confidence is like a heavy chain that hinders children’s progress, depriving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society. What"s more, in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, confidence has become a key quality that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident.
批改:正反论述,词汇和句法丰富
原文:In brief, confidence is the catalyst for societal and personal development , from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality.
批改:呼应主题
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:18/20分。
1. 题目要求:作文内容包含全面,主题明确,层次分明,总共165字,可以再多写一两句话;
2. 语言表达:运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇,定语从句,非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒;
3. 行文逻辑:采用恰当的衔接手法,行文流畅,内容连贯;
4. 建议:模板运用的不错,要继续背诵,继续写作,加强熟练度,进一步丰富自己的语料库和写作思路,加油!
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