2021年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2021年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二写作冲刺教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of manners of exercise among inhaitants at certain city. Alone exercise takes the lead at 54.3%, followed by exercise with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, means such as doing sports with families, and working out with club mebers are also included, accounting for 23.9%, and 15.8%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. As we all know, the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choices. Consequently, an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health. Additionally, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, health is always the first.” With the influences caused by pandemic, we prefer to work out with the intimate or by self rather than exercise along with club members or guild members.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above satistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of people, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the pademic, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following years.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：exercise

批改：by是介词，改成exercising

原文：club mebers

批改：team

原文：The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of manners of exercise among inhaitants at certain city. Alone exercise takes the lead at 54.3%, followed by exercise with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, means such as doing sports with families, and working out with club mebers are also included, accounting for 23.9%, and 15.8%, respectively.

批改：能够完整地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯。

原文：by self

批改：alone

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. As we all know, the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choices. Consequently, an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health. Additionally, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, health is always the first.” With the influences caused by pandemic, we prefer to work out with the intimate or by self rather than exercise along with club members or guild members.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：pademic

批改：pandemic

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above satistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of people, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the pademic, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following years.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，注意介词后加动词ing形式。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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