考研英语一2023年大作文实例分析与批改

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一、考研英语一2023年大作文题目

考研英语一2023年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay based on the picture below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2023年大作文批改例文

The picture vividly depicts a lively scene of a dragon boat race in a village. Two dragon boats, with team members rowing energetically, cut through the water. Crowds of spectators line the riverbank and the bridge, cheering enthusiastically. An elderly man exclaims to a woman beside him, “It"s great! Our village"s dragon boat race is getting more and more lively!”

This scene implies the increasing popularity and revival of traditional cultural activities in rural China. Dragon boat racing, a tradition associated with the Dragon Boat Festival, is not only a sport but also a carrier of cultural heritage. Its growing vibrancy in villages reflects people"s enhanced awareness and love for traditional culture.

In my view, this is a positive trend. Traditional cultural activities like dragon boat races can strengthen community cohesion, preserve cultural roots, and also attract tourists, boosting rural development. We should continue to support and promote such activities to ensure traditional culture thrives in modern times.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The picture vividly depicts a lively scene of a dragon boat race in a village. Two dragon boats, with team members rowing energetically, cut through the water. Crowds of spectators line the riverbank and the bridge, cheering enthusiastically. An elderly man exclaims to a woman beside him, “It"s great! Our village"s dragon boat race is getting more and more lively!”

批改：首段详细具体地描述了画面内容，细节描述地很清晰，用词也较丰富，表达顺畅，可以在段末结合画面用一句话给出自己的观点 “The illustration highlights the importance of the inheritance of traditional Chinese culture/traditional festivals/traditional cultural activities.”

原文：This scene implies the increasing popularity and revival of traditional cultural activities in rural China.

批改：画面内涵抓的很好，可以从继承、保护与发扬传统文化/传统节日/传统文化活动等角度立意，可以用到的相关的词汇短语有 “carry forward/inheritance 继承；preservation 保护；promotion 宣传/发展/发扬"

原文：Dragon boat racing, a tradition associated with the Dragon Boat Festival, is not only a sport but also a carrier of cultural heritage.

批改：阐述了赛龙舟这一传统文化活动”是什么“，还可以举出类似传统文化活动的具体例子，如中秋节一家人齐聚一堂吃月饼、赏月就是传统文化活动及其精神内核传承的又一体现

原文：Its growing vibrancy in villages reflects people"s enhanced awareness and love for traditional culture.

批改：传统节日重新焕发生机活力反映出人们更加热爱传统文化，保护传统文化的意识增加

原文：In my view, this is a positive trend. Traditional cultural activities like dragon boat races can strengthen community cohesion, preserve cultural roots, and also attract tourists, boosting rural development.

批改：从促进社群团结、保护文化根基、带动旅游促进乡村经济发展等角度说明了传统文化活动的多重意义，也就是”为什么要继承发扬传统文化活动"，论述较为全面

原文：We should continue to support and promote such activities to ensure traditional culture thrives in modern times.

批改：结尾提出我们应当“怎么做”，保护和促进传统文化活动的发展，使其持续焕发生机活力。文章根据“是什么-为什么-怎么做”的结构行文，论述较有条理。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16/20

1）内容上：描述了画面内容，论述切合主题；

2）语言上：表达丰富灵活，语句通顺；

3）结构上：内容较充实，论述较为完整；

4）学习建议：

1.主干部分也可以围绕个人、社会和国家等角度分析，可按照如下行文逻辑：

-个人可以从文化继承、保护与发展（inheritance, preservation and promotion of traditional culture）的角度展开，如学习传统习俗能增强我们的文化认同感、举办传统节日及相关活动能给予我们良好的文化艺术熏陶、践行尊老爱幼等优秀传统美德有助于培养良好的品质等；

-社会和国家层面可以从文化自觉、文化自信的角度展开，如传统文化活动有助于调动人们的参与积极性，从而加强社群凝聚力、促进建设文明和谐的社会氛围，有利于增强综合国力，提升我国的国际影响力和竞争力。

2.论述过程中可以采用正反对比、举例子、引用等方法，如可以从文化遗产（cultural heritage）、传统节日（traditional festivals）和传统文化活动（traditional cultural events）等方面举出具体例子；

3.结尾可以从“如何促进传统文化的继承与发展”提出一些建议或举措，如结合快速发展的技术，在节日期间可以举办线上分享活动，线下互动答题（online and offline activities），拓展传统节日的形式。

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