作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2014年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语二作文模板常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.
二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts the change of urban and rural populations in China for two decades. In 1990, the number of urban populations was 300, but by 2010, this rate had substantially risen to 666. In contrast, the number of rural populations experience a significant decrease of 160 during the same period 1990 to 2010.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summeried as follows of. To start with, as the conduct orchestrating the symphony of change, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound economic system, enabling rural populations to have ample opportunities for working in urban. In addition, an increasing number of young rural people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, working at city is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phemomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban populations will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of rural populations will likely continue to derease relatively stable.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:300
批改:后加单位million
原文: 666
批改:后加单位million
原文:experience
批改:用过去式
原文:160
批改:后加单位million
原文:1990
批改:前缺少介词from
原文:The bar chart clearly depicts the change of urban and rural populations in China for two decades. In 1990, the number of urban populations was 300, but by 2010, this rate had substantially risen to 666. In contrast, the number of rural populations experience a significant decrease of 160 during the same period 1990 to 2010.
批改:看图表时,一定要认真看是否有单位
原文:summeried
批改:summarized
原文:of
批改:多余,删去
原文:conduct
批改:conductor
原文:urban
批改:urban是形容词,后加areas
原文:at
批改:in
原文:he core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summeried as follows of. To start with, as the conduct orchestrating the symphony of change, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound economic system, enabling rural populations to have ample opportunities for working in urban. In addition, an increasing number of young rural people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, working at city is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phemomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
批改:能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因,全面细致。
原文:derease
批改:decrease
原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban populations will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of rural populations will likely continue to derease relatively stable.
批改:分析并预测了未来的趋势,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:9/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,注意在描述图表信息时注意看是否有单位。
2)词汇方面,基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误;句式和语法方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变,但是要注意句子结构的完整,不要缺少成分;
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的比较认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。一定要细心一些,注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
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