2015年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2015年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二作文范文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of one orban citizens" spent in Spring Festival. New years" gifis take the lead at 40%, followed by traffic,party and others at 20%.

The care reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-school advancement of society, people"s attitudes ways of consumption have undergo significant changes, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why many number of people choose gifts to give others. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, happiness is always present. "Nowadays, people are use the free time in the Spring Festival that take tourings with their family members or friends or they often play parties with friends. As a result party and traffic accounting for 20% respectively. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of our country citizens, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：one

批改：题干中没有说是某个人，一般来讲调查应该是针对人群的，这里的one应删除

原文：orban

批改：urban

原文：spent

批改：这里需要名词spending

原文：years"

批改：首字母要大写，另外要用单数所有格Year"s

原文：gifis

批改：gifts

原文：party

批改：这里要用复数parties

原文：The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of one orban citizens" spent in Spring Festival. New years" gifis take the lead at 40%, followed by traffic,party and others at 20%.

批改：对图表内容的描述很全面，注意单词拼写和单复数

原文：care

批改：core

原文：school

批改：speed

原文： ways of

批改：介词应该用towards

原文：undergo

批改：undergone

原文：, people

批改：这是两句，应该为句号+大写

原文：number of

批改：多余，应删除

原文：use

批改：这里要用现在时using

原文：that

批改：表示目的应该用to

原文：play

批改：动词应该用hold，表示举行

原文：accounting

批改：主语是复数，动词用原形account即可

原文：choice

批改：这里要用复数choices

原文：20%

批改：后面建议加上each，表达更清晰

原文：The care reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-school advancement of society, people"s attitudes ways of consumption have undergo significant changes, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why many number of people choose gifts to give others. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, happiness is always present. "Nowadays, people are use the free time in the Spring Festival that take tourings with their family members or friends or they often play parties with friends. As a result party and traffic accounting for 20% respectively. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：第一点用“人们不单追求物质享受”来解释送礼物的占比最高，不是很合理，可以说人们的收入越来越高了，所以有能力送他人礼物。可以再思考下

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of our country citizens, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：表达个人观点，注意单复数问题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：7/15

题目要求：对漫画内容描绘全面，个人观点切题，但论述部分第一条的内容需要再思考下；

语言表达：全文用了较多经典句式，但语法错误较多，导致内容表达上不够流畅清晰；如果目前还不能准确使用例句，建议先用自己的语言表达，锻炼下语法水平；

行文逻辑：第一段描述饼图内容，第二段给出详细论述，第三段表达个人观点，架构完整，论述内容第一点可以再思考下；

修改建议：改正原文错误；继续多多积累经典句式；提升语法水平；提高单词拼写的准确性；

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