考研英语作文批改命题趋势越来越关注社会热点与考生思辨能力。本文带来的2011年考研英语二批改范例,透过图表/图画深挖现象背后的本质,由启航教育老师逐段精批,可帮助考生建立稳定的考研英语写作思维框架。
一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文
必须使用黑色字迹书写:在答题卡区域内作答,超出黑色矩形边框限定区域的答案无效。
The bar chart clearly depicts the number of supernatic for some brand to the China car on 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of China brand car was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand car experiened a significant deline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of uS brand remained stable and steady.
The core reasons for the observed phenonmenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to usily domestic care and have become the primary group. In addition, Chinese society is undersoing an extensive and profound transformation. I my view, the funddamental reason for this phenmenon is the significant progress made by china"s manufaturing in dustry in responding to these changes, considering these factors the deapic ted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising
what about trends? I am confident that proportion of China brand car will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Jampanese car will likely continue to decrease
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:supernatic
批改:拼写错误
原文:brand
批改:复数brands
原文:to the China car
批改:in Chinese car market
原文:on
批改:年份前加in
原文:to
批改:and
原文:China
批改:Chinese
原文:deline
批改:decline
原文:uS
批改:American代表美国的
原文:The bar chart clearly depicts the number of supernatic for some brand to the China car on 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of China brand car was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand car experiened a significant deline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of uS brand remained stable and steady.
批改:能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容,内容完整,注意避免小的语言错误。
原文:Against
批改:逗号后单词首字母小写
原文:usily
批改:using
原文:care
批改:cars
原文:undersoing
批改:undergoing
原文:funddamental
批改:fundamental
原文:phenmenon
批改:phenomenon
原文:china"s
批改:China"s
原文:manufaturing
批改:manufacturing
原文:,
批改:句号
原文:considering
批改:首字母大写
原文:deapic ted
批改:depicted
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenonmenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to usily domestic care and have become the primary group. In addition, Chinese society is undersoing an extensive and profound transformation. I my view, the funddamental reason for this phenmenon is the significant progress made by china"s manufaturing in dustry in responding to these changes, considering these factors the deapic ted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising
批改:能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因,全面细致。但是语言错误较多,需注意
原文:what
批改:开头单词首字母大写
批改:加future
批改:加the
原文:China
批改:Chinese
原文:Jampanese
批改:Japanese
原文:what about trends? I am confident that proportion of China brand car will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Jampanese car will likely continue to decrease
批改:分析并预测了未来的趋势,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:8/15
论述的内容全面,逻辑结构清晰,字数符合作文的要求,值得表扬,希望能够注意以下的小问题。
词汇方面:注意避免单词拼写错误,基础词汇一定要拼写正确,国家名作为专有名词首字母要大写,注意名词单复数的正确使用。
语法方面:要注意句子结构的完整。
其它细节:逗号后的单词首字母要小写以及一句话开头的单词首字母大写。
希望能够发扬写作的优点,避免以上的问题。继续加油,一定能上岸!
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