考研英语一2010年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一作文范文每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2010年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目

考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文

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As shown in the cartoon, there is a hot pot, filling with a host of cultural examples, including Kungfu Lao She and so on. cultural Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that is diversity is the brush that paints a bright future.

This phenomenon is though-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, cultural diversity can ignite our creativity, nurture our souls and promote personal growth, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming.

On the other hand, neglecting cultural diversity is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future society. It not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image.

In brief, culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：加逗号

原文：cultural

批改：多余删去

原文：is

批改：多余删去

原文：diversity

批改：前加cultural，文化多样性

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there is a hot pot, filling with a host of cultural examples, including Kungfu Lao She and so on. cultural Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that is diversity is the brush that paints a bright future.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：though

批改：thought

原文：them

批改：这句话里前后的them指代不清晰

原文：hindering

批改：改成谓语hinders

原文：its

批改：its又指代谁

原文：On the other hand, neglecting cultural diversity is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future society. It not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image.

批改：注意代词使用时要注意指代明确和清晰

原文：This phenomenon is though-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, cultural diversity can ignite our creativity, nurture our souls and promote personal growth, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming.

批改：注意避免拼写错误

原文：traditional culture.

批改：这里应该是你选取的主题词：cultural diversity

原文：In brief, culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意正确使用谓语以及代词要指代明确。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好，第一段的主题词注意要写全。继续加油。

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