考研英语一2013年大作文怎么写？附例文批改

正在备考考研英语的你，是否还在为2013年考研英语一大作文的写法犯愁？本文精选一篇高分组同学的批改例文，系统梳理考研英语作文话题的常考话题与写作框架。透过启航教育老师的逐段点评，你能直观感受高分作文的得分诀窍。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are a considerable number of graduates, standing at the junction of their lives and contemplating making their own choices, which include finding jobs, going abroad, contiuing studies and starting their own business. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is appropriate choice that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, wise choices can image our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfilled, thus making life rewarding and meaningful rather than self-doubt. What is more, in modern society full of changes, chances and challenges, making sensible choice has become a key factor that distingushes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident.

In brief, choose the life path appropriate for us, is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop individual potiential, and make our world shine with renewed brilliance

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：contiuing

批改：continuing

原文：at the junction

批改：改为 at the crossroads 是更地道的表达

原文： making

批改：删去，表达会更简洁

原文：appropriate choice

批改：此处缺少冠词，改为 an appropriate choice

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

批改：语法正确

原文：image

批改：改为动词 ignite

原文：self-fulfilled

批改：此处为名词，改为 self-fulfillment

原文： meaningful

批改：加逗号

原文：self-doubt

批改：此处为形容词，改为 self-consuming

原文：choice

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为复数 choices

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文： brilliance

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

原文：choose

批改：动词原形不能作主语，改为 choosing

原文：the life path appropriate for us,

批改：改为 an appropriate life path for us

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2.拼写要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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