2011年考研英语二大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

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一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

Bands from China Have more Parten

In the bar chart clearly depicts the parten of Chinese band. Japanese band and American bands in 2008 and 2009. I 2oo8 the percentage of Chinese band is 25%, but by 2009, this figure had risen to 32%. I contrast, the percentage of Japanese band experienced a significant decline of 10% from 2008 to 2009. Meanwhile, the number of American band remained stable.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, we held Olympic Game in 2008. After this, we had more confidence from our country. In addition, our production power had becoming better and better. More and more people would like to use Chinese bands. Considering these factors, the dipicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about the future trend? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese bands will steadily increase in the fllowing decades. In contrast, the propotion of abroad bands will continue to decline.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：In the bar chart clearly depicts the parten of Chinese band. Japanese band and American bands in 2008 and 2009.

批改：首段概括图表内容可以参考如下 “The bar chart clearly depicts the change of the market shares among Chinese, Japanese and American automobile brands from 2008 to 2009.”

原文：parten

批改：市场份额用 market share

批改：用逗号

原文： I 2oo8

批改：应为 In 2008

原文：is

批改：注意时态，用 was

原文：32%

批改：描述数据时尽量准确，图上可以看到国产品牌的比重超过了30%，因此可以说nearly/approximately/around 30%，有意识地积累一些可替换的小词，有利于提高表达的准确度

原文： I contrast

批改：正确写法为 In contrast

原文：the number of

批改：图中展现的是不同汽车品牌的市场份额占比，除了 the percentage of...，还可以说 the proportion of...

原文：In the bar chart clearly depicts the parten of Chinese band. Japanese band and American bands in 2008 and 2009. I 2oo8 the percentage of Chinese band is 25%, but by 2009, this figure had risen to 32%. I contrast, the percentage of Japanese band experienced a significant decline of 10% from 2008 to 2009. Meanwhile, the number of American band remained stable.

批改：首段概括了图表内容，应准确描述图中各项数据和它们之间的变化，同时注意区分不同图表类型（柱状图/折线图/饼状图等）及应当如何描述；除此之外，丰富用词，变换表达，像percentage/proportion/rate类似意思就存在多种表达方式，这样文章语言也就不会那么受限了

原文：a significant decline of

批改：decline除了可以作名词，还可以作动词，学会灵活转换词性，如用 significantly decline 表达起来是不是会更简洁高效呢

原文：from

批改：改为 for

原文：To start with, we held Olympic Game in 2008. After this, we had more confidence from our country.

批改：举出了北京奥运会这样一个具体例子，引出国产汽车品牌为什么会更受欢迎——人们对国产品牌的信心增加，热情高涨

原文：production power

批改：生产力可以说 productive force

原文：had becoming

批改：直到现在仍旧处在不断发展过程中，改为 is getting

原文：bands

批改：正确写法为 brand

原文：dipicted

批改：改为 depicted

原文：In addition, our production power had becoming better and better. More and more people would like to use Chinese bands. Considering these factors, the dipicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：多结合时事热点，积累相关表达，本段从国家和社会层面入手，还可以从市场/企业层面入手，“国产品牌的自身优势”这一角度展开论述，梳理出自己的行文逻辑文章才会有层次和条理

原文：fllowing

批改：正确写法为 following

原文：propotion

批改：正确写法为 proportion

原文：abroad bands

批改：改为 other brands

原文：bands

批改：正确写法为 brand

原文：What about the future trend? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese bands will steadily increase in the fllowing decades. In contrast, the propotion of abroad bands will continue to decline.

批改：结尾预测未来国产汽车品牌的市场份额仍将继续扩大，建议可以对作为市场主体的国产汽车制造商或汽车企业提出“怎么做”的一些建议，如引进更多技术提升产品质量

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：6/15

1）内容上：概括了图表内容，数据及其变化描述还可以更准确；

2）语言上：出现部分词汇和语法错误，表达可以更灵活，句型句式可以更丰富；

3）结构上：内容不是很充实，缺乏论述逻辑，原因分析不够到位；

4）学习建议：

文章表达方面尤其需要注意词汇和语法的准确运用。有待提升的主要有三方面，一是语言上多积累表变化的动词、表程度的副词和描述最大最小值的一些短语，描述图表会更准确和形象；二是内容上可以从国家-社会-市场/企业-个人等主体展开，按“是什么（给观点）——为什么（析原因）——怎么做（结尾提措施/做法）”的逻辑展开，这样主干各要点更清晰明了；三针对现象-原因型文章，主要分析是什么原因导致该种趋势或现象的发生，写作过程中按各个主体的角度串联论述逻辑会让文章更有条理，如：由于经济发展，综合国力提升（国家）——一方面人们购买力提升（社会），另一方面国产品牌有着自身优势广受欢迎（市场/企业），从而使人们对国产品牌更有信心，尤其是年轻群体（个人偏好）——因此国产汽车品牌份额呈持续上升（总结）——未来将继续大力发展汽车制造业（展望+提措施）

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