2011年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2011年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the car brand of market in our country. In 2008, the percentage of China brand was approximately 28%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 33%.In contrast, the proportion of Japan brand experienced a significant decline of about 7% during the same period. Simultaneously , the percentage of America brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition,against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those porn in the 1990s and 2000s are accustomed to driving cars made in China and have become the primary user group.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of China brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast,the proportion of Japan brand will likely continue to decrease and America brand will remain relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the car brand of market

批改：题干描述是国内轿车市场部分品牌市场份额，表述应改为the market shares of car brands

原文：Japan

批改：日本的要用Japanese

原文：brand

批改：要用复数brands

原文：brand

批改：要用复数brands

原文：China

批改：中国的要用Chinese

原文：America

批改：美国的要用American

原文：brand

批改：复数brands

原文：China brand

批改：Chinese brands

原文：Japan brand

批改：Japanese brands

原文：America brand

批改：American brands

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the car brand of market in our country. In 2008, the percentage of China brand was approximately 28%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 33%.In contrast, the proportion of Japan brand experienced a significant decline of about 7% during the same period. Simultaneously , the percentage of America brand remained stable and steady.

批改：对图表内容的描述比较全面，用词可以改正下

原文：porn

批改：born

原文：2000s

批改：后面要加逗号

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition,against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those porn in the 1990s and 2000s are accustomed to driving cars made in China and have become the primary user group.

批改：从社会和人群两个方面论证了现象，注意拼写和标点

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of China brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast,the proportion of Japan brand will likely continue to decrease and America brand will remain relatively stable.

批改：表达个人观点，注意用词的准确性

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

题目要求：对图表内容表述清晰，论证内容和个人观点符合题意；

语言表达：全文用了较多经典句式，但用词错误较多，影响了整体表达。论证部分和范文较为相似，练习阶段也可以尝试用自己的语言表达，语法水平提升后再套用模板效果更好；

行文逻辑：第一段描述图标内容，第二段给出详细论述，第三段表达个人观点，架构完整，但对题干内容的描述可以再准确一些；

修改建议：改正原文错误；优化开头内容；继续多多积累经典句式；巩固单词用法；

整体上还可以，继续加油~

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