考研英语一2013年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一写作技巧每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2013年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As is symbolically depicted in the figureabove, There are many graduates. standingon the crossroads, with a conflictingexpression on their face. They can chooseto attend the exam of postgraduatego to the abroad、 find the job andmake a business. The illustration effectivelyconveys the meaning that the choice isSo important that the issue deservesthe highest level of attention and consideration.

There exist plenty of causes of myopinions in various aspects. To begin with,For instance, my roommate, was addictedto learning the knowledge about concernedjob, which has equipped him with highsalary work. During this period, all of usadmire his capacity. However, The majorityof graduate hold that pursuing a higher degreewill provide them with a br oader platformto enhance themselves, which may put themin a beneficial position in the future. Inthe end, we must acknowledge the factthat choice play a central role in futuredevelopment.

All in all, It is not difficult to draw theconclusion that enough attention must beturned to choice by ourselves and college.For one thing, it is imperative for graduateto analyze which selection are suitable. Foranother, the college ought to assist themby speaking and activity. Let us believe thatthis is the first step toward a brighterfuture for all of us.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：s is symbolically depicted in the figureabove, There are many graduates. standingon the crossroads, with a conflictingexpression on their face.

批改：句子开头“As is symbolically depicted in the figure above”表述正确，引出图画描述

原文：They can chooseto attend the exam of postgraduatego to the abroad、 find the job andmake a business.

批改：“attend the exam of postgraduate”表述错误，应是“take the postgraduate entrance exam”；“go to the abroad”表述错误，“abroad”前不用“the”，应是“go abroad”

原文：The illustration effectivelyconveys the meaning that the choice isSo important that the issue deservesthe highest level of attention and consideration.

批改：“So”首字母不应大写；整体句子结构较复杂，但表意基本清晰，说明图画传达了选择很重要这一意义。

原文：There exist plenty of causes of myopinions in various aspects. To begin with,For instance, my roommate, was addictedto learning the knowledge about concernedjob, which has equipped him with highsalary work.

批改：“To begin with”和“For instance”重复使用，且“For instance”位置不当；“concerned job”表述错误，应是“the job concerned”；“high salary work”表述不准确，可改为“a high - salary job”

原文：During this period, all of usadmire his capacity.

批改：时态使用错误，“During this period”表明是过去一段时间，应用一般过去时“admired”

原文：However, The majorityof graduate hold that pursuing a higher degreewill provide them with a br oader platformto enhance themselves, which may put themin a beneficial position in the future.

批改：“The majority of”后应接名词复数“graduates”；“hold”使用正确

原文：Inthe end, we must acknowledge the factthat choice play a central role in futuredevelopment.

批改：“choice”是单数，谓语动词应用“plays”。

原文：ll in all, It is not difficult to draw theconclusion that enough attention must beturned to choice by ourselves and college.

批改：“It is not difficult to draw the conclusion that...”表述正确；“turned to choice”表述错误，应是“paid to choice”

原文：or one thing, it is imperative for graduateto analyze which selection are suitable.

批改：“graduate”应改为复数“graduates”；“which selection are”中“selection”是单数，应改为“which selections are”。

原文：Foranother, the college ought to assist themby speaking and activity.

批改：“by speaking and activity”表述错误，应是“through speeches and activities”。

原文：Let us believe thatthis is the first step toward a brighterfuture for all of us.

批改：此句表意清晰，表达了一种积极的态度。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/20

题目要求：题目要求基于给定图画写一篇 160 - 200 词的作文，需描述图画、解读其意图并给出评论。这篇作文整体围绕图画中毕业生面临多种选择这一核心展开，尝试完成了描述、解读和评论三个任务，在方向上基本符合题目要求。

语言表达：存在大量语法错误，像主谓不一致（“choice play a central role”应改为“choice plays a central role”）、名词单复数错误（“the majority of graduate”应改为“the majority of graduates”）、时态错误（“all of us admire his capacity”应改为“all of us admired his ability”）等，严重影响了句子的正确性和流畅性。

内容层面：在内容上，文章对毕业生面临的选择进行了思考，提到了不同选择背后的原因，如室友为工作学习相关知识以及多数毕业生认为追求更高学历能提供更广阔发展平台等，还针对毕业生和学校如何应对选择给出了建议，展现出一定的思考深度。

修改建议：仔细检查文章中的语法错误，包括主谓一致、名词单复数、时态等，确保句子结构正确。

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