作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2023年考研英语一大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语一作文范文常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、考研英语一2023年大作文题目
考研英语一2023年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay based on the picture below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、考研英语一2023年大作文批改例文
As shown in the picture,there is vrandparents are talking about dragon boat race,
and saying that our village"s dragon boat race are more and more lively. Evidently, the pircture intends to convey to readers that it is Chinese traditional culture that plays an important and positive role in our personal lives.
This phenomenon is thought -provoking in serveal ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, while certain Chinese traditions may be outdated but the spirit of dragon boat race one that should never lose its luster, as it is a crucial piece in shaping the admirable character of the Chinese people. On the other hand , dragon boat race can ignite our creativity. and promote personal growth and self -funfillment,thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming,
In brief,dragon boat race is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate th tradiantal culture.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:there is vrandparents are
批改:there are old man and woman
原文:are
批改:主谓一致,改成is
原文:pircture
批改:picture
原文:s shown in the picture,there is vrandparents are talking about dragon boat race, and saying that our village"s dragon boat race are more and more lively. Evidently, the pircture intends to convey to readers that it is Chinese traditional culture that plays an important and positive role in our personal lives.
批改:能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象,并能够直接点明作文的主题。
原文:serveal
批改:several
批改:加is
批改:逗号
原文:dragon boat race
批改:the spirit of dragon boat race
原文:This phenomenon is thought -provoking in serveal ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, while certain Chinese traditions may be outdated but the spirit of dragon boat race one that should never lose its luster, as it is a crucial piece in shaping the admirable character of the Chinese people. On the other hand , dragon boat race can ignite our creativity. and promote personal growth and self -funfillment,thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming,
批改:该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述,语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子,值得表扬。
原文:dragon boat race
批改:the spirit of dragon boat race
原文:th
批改:the
原文:In brief,dragon boat race is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate th tradiantal culture.
批改:起到了呼吁和号召的作用,紧扣主题。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:15/20
内容切题,全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面,注意避免拼写错误;句式方面,注意句子结构的完整,不要缺少成分;语法方面,注意主谓一致问题。逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,结构清晰。
修改建议:可以看出作文完成的很认真,无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰,值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。
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