考研英语一2011年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2011年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一作文模板备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

The cartoon provides us with a socially symbolic scene: on the boat sit two tourists, disgraceful as well as dishonorable，throwing garbage into the water ,with a casual attitude . Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environment pollution requires great attention both in ourpersonal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought -provoking in several ways, but three of them are particulary significant . First and formost , tragically, although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon, its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of economic interests, have disregarded the importance of protecting the environment. What"s more, no one can deny such an obvious fact that environment plays a crucial role in sustained and healthy growth. At last, not only does protecting environment maintain natural ecological balance , but it also enable to realize harmony between humanity and nature .

All in all, by no means should we give up our efforts to protect the environment. It is imperative for the authorities to make strict laws to protect the environment and we should also enhance tourists" awareness of environment protecting. Only through the joint efforts of all people can we have a better life.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The cartoon provides us with a socially symbolic scene: on the boat sit two tourists, disgraceful as well as dishonorable，throwing garbage into the water ,with a casual attitude . Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environment pollution requires great attention both in ourpersonal lives and in society

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：formost

批改：foremost

原文：enable

批改：主语是it，改成enables

原文：This phenomenon is thought -provoking in several ways, but three of them are particulary significant . First and formost , tragically, although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon, its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of economic interests, have disregarded the importance of protecting the environment. What"s more, no one can deny such an obvious fact that environment plays a crucial role in sustained and healthy growth. At last, not only does protecting environment maintain natural ecological balance , but it also enable to realize harmony between humanity and nature .

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：All in all, by no means should we give up our efforts to protect the environment. It is imperative for the authorities to make strict laws to protect the environment and we should also enhance tourists" awareness of environment protecting. Only through the joint efforts of all people can we have a better life.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。且倒装结构使用较为熟练，值得表扬。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，要注意主谓一致问题。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

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