考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2017年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一写作技巧教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon,there is man,lying on the seat and boasting that he has a large number of books.On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal,another man is making a yearly plan of reading 20 books.Evidently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future for children,while daydreaming is the shackle that hinders their progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,being practical can nurture our souls,and promote personall growth ang self-fulfillment,thus making life rewarding ang meaningful,rather than being self-consuming.On the other hand,daydreaming is like a heavy chain that hinders students’s progress,depriving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief,being practical is the catalyst for personal development,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore,we should actively support and advocate this practice;additionally,we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming to ensure children’s growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：In the left-hand cartoon,there is man,lying on the seat and boasting that he has a large number of books.On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal,another man is making a yearly plan of reading 20 books.Evidently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future for children,while daydreaming is the shackle that hinders their progress.

批改：能够清晰全面的描绘出图画中展示的内容并点明主题，句子结构连贯。

原文：ang

批改：and

原文： students’

批改： students’

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,being practical can nurture our souls,and promote personall growth ang self-fulfillment,thus making life rewarding ang meaningful,rather than being self-consuming.On the other hand,daydreaming is like a heavy chain that hinders students’s progress,depriving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：In brief,being practical is the catalyst for personal development,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore,we should actively support and advocate this practice;additionally,we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming to ensure children’s growth stays on course.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误以及名词复数所有格的正确形式；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，语法基础很好。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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