考研英语一2024年大作文失分点批改

本文整理了2024年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语写作冲刺的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

The left drawing shows an exercise area for citizens where some people are gathered, and a man remarks: “The small newly-built park right in front of my home is really great!” Meanwhile, the right chart displays that from 2020 to 2022, the number of parks in a certain city increased significantly, rising from 406 to 670.

Such a scenario and the statistics above, apparently, can be associated with the growing popularity of parks among citizens. To begin with, parks can provide a free space for people to relax and have fun with their friends and families. In addition, compared to previous years, with the progress of the times and the development of China’s economy, more and more people have realized the importance of physical exercise and social interaction. Furthermore, this is an initiative of the Chinese government to adhere to the people-oriented principle and continuously strive to enhance people’s sense of happiness.

As a senior preparing for the postgraduate entrance examination, I am hopeful that there will be more and more places for people that can bring me enjoyment, inspire my passion for learning, and help me relax to ease my mental and physical pressure.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The left drawing shows an exercise area for citizens where some people are gathered, and a man remarks: “The small newly-built park right in front of my home is really great!” Meanwhile, the right chart displays that from 2020 to 2022, the number of parks in a certain city increased significantly, rising from 406 to 670.

批改：对漫画内容描述的很全面，语言连贯。

原文：Such a scenario and the statistics above, apparently, can be associated with the growing popularity of parks among citizens. To begin with, parks can provide a free space for people to relax and have fun with their friends and families. In addition, compared to previous years, with the progress of the times and the development of China’s economy, more and more people have realized the importance of physical exercise and social interaction. Furthermore, this is an initiative of the Chinese government to adhere to the people-oriented principle and continuously strive to enhance people’s sense of happiness.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文： for people

批改：句中 “that can bring me enjoyment” 修饰的是 “places”，“for people” 插入后，容易被误解 “bring me enjoyment” 的逻辑主语是 “people”而非 “places”，造成语义混乱，因此把for people去掉

原文：As a senior preparing for the postgraduate entrance examination, I am hopeful that there will be more and more places for people that can bring me enjoyment, inspire my passion for learning, and help me relax to ease my mental and physical pressure.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，语法基础很好。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬，继续加油。

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