2021年考研英语二大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

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一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of exercise means of residents in a certain city. Exercising alone takes the lead at 54.3%,followed by exercising with friends at 47.7% .In addition,factors such as exercising with family and exercising with club members are also considered,accounting for 23.9% and 15.8% ,respectively.

What about future trends?I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of people,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,in the wake of high-speed advancement of society,people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction,and they also pursue inspiritual enjoyment.This explains why an increasing number of people choose to do exercise rather than to stay at home.In addition,an increasing number of people believe that in modern society full of changes,health is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of exercise means of residents in a certain city. Exercising alone takes the lead at 54.3%,followed by exercising with friends at 47.7% .In addition,factors such as exercising with family and exercising with club members are also considered,accounting for 23.9% and 15.8% ,respectively.

批改：该段完成 “解读图表” 的核心任务，按占比从高到低呈现数据，核心趋势（独自运动、结伴运动占比领先）捕捉准确，数据表述无错误。

原文：What about future trends?I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of people,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：这应该是你的第三段内容吧，二三段颠倒了。

原文：decad

批改：本段对未来趋势做出了判断，相对中规中矩，如果想出彩可以多积累其他句子。

原文：inspiritual

批改： “inspiritual” 为错误词汇，应为 “spiritual”

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,in the wake of high-speed advancement of society,people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction,and they also pursue inspiritual enjoyment.This explains why an increasing number of people choose to do exercise rather than to stay at home.In addition,an increasing number of people believe that in modern society full of changes,health is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.

批改：语言没啥大问题，但是所提出的两个原因均停留在解释“为什么人们要锻炼”的层面，而建议分析“为什么人们选择这些不同的锻炼方式”，去触及具体原因（如时间灵活性、社交需求、组织难度等）。不然，图表展示这么多方式的意义是什么？那肯定是需要去分析这些多元因素和原因的。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15分

本文结构安排可以进一步优化，将结论段置于分析段之前，不符合常见的论述逻辑。在内容上，图表描述段完成得较好。然而，核心的分析段落未能有效完成任务，所给出的原因过于宽泛，未能精准解释图表中反映出的不同锻炼方式的选择偏好问题。此外，文中存在一些标点和拼写错误。建议未来写作时，先确保文章结构符合“描述-分析-总结”的常规顺序，并在分析原因时，始终紧扣图表数据所展现的具体现象进行深入挖掘。加油~

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