作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2013年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语二作文范文常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in part-time job situations among college students at a certain university. In the freshman year, the percentage of students working part-time was 67.77%, but by the junior year, this rate had gradyally risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of students working part-time experienced a significant increase of 16.31% from the junior year to the senior year.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to promote cooperation between universities and enterprises, enabling university students ample opportunities to find a suitableart jotme In addition, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, accumulating work experience through part-time jobs is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering there factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of students working part-time will steadily increase in the following decades.
三、考研英语作文批改
批改:语法正确
原文:gradyally
批改:gradually
批改:开头段表达不错,清晰地阐述了图表内容
批改:语法正确
原文:ample
批改:enable sb to do sth, 此处改为 to have ample
原文:suitableart jotme
批改:注意拼写 suitable part-time job
批改:语法正确
原文:there
批改:these
批改:内容表达很好,原因分析也很到位
批改:语法正确,表达也很好
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:12分/ 15分
题目要求:总体上来说是切题的,表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的
语言表达:存在几处语法和拼写问题,词汇表达不错,一些句式表达也很好
结构逻辑:文章的结构完整清晰,内容也比较丰富具体
修改建议:1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心。之后可以多积累素材,自己多练练句子,进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备,尽量多用自己的语言来写,总的来说写的很好,加油!
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