考研英语一2010年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2010年考研英语一备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语一作文范文话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语一高分写作模板。

一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目

考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文

This drawing is about a big hotpot,which contains many delicious cultural elements,such as Shakespeare,Chinese Kung Fu,Lao She,Peking opera,Bi Sheng,Albert Einstein and so on.At the bottom of this picture says ”Cultural hotpot,delicious and nutritious.”

This drawing is intended to tell us that we are living in a century when eastern culture and western culture,traditional culture and modern culture are blended together. Today’s cultural market is just like a big hotpot which contains many different things.In this hotpot,there’s Shakespeare which represent traditional western culture,Kung Fu represents Chinese traditional culture,And Albert Einstein represents modern technologies.’Eating’ this cultural hotpot is very joyful,at the same time it is very useful for your self-improvement.

I think this drawing is very meaningful.In today’s world,the cost for us to enjoy different cultures is easier than past few decades.If we want to broaden our horizon ,we have to embrace different cultures.Every culture has its own charm. The process of learning different cultures is interesting,and that would lead to a good result,that result can be spiritual or physical.As a Chinese student,I think we need to inherit Chinese cultural heritage.At the same time,we must learn the good part of western cultures.Only in this way, we can truly become a better student.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：o

批改：大写

原文：ay

批改：这句缺少主语哦，picture后面加逗号，it says, " ".

原文：contains many delicious cultural elements,such as Shakespeare,Chinese Kung Fu,Lao She,Peking opera,Bi Sheng,Albert Einstein and so on.At the bottom of this picture says ”Cultural hotpot,delicious and nutritiou

批改：描述漫画还是不错的，很完整，句子结构合理，但是注意句子不能丢成分哦，不然语法就错啦。

原文：ent

批改：加s

原文：,Ku

批改：前面加and，要是想写复合句，记得加连接词，

原文：,

批改：句号

原文：at

批改：前面加and，at the same time不是连词

原文：dern culture are blended together. Today’s cultural market is just like a big hotpot which contains many different things.In this hotpot,there’s Shakespeare which represent traditional western culture,Kung Fu represents Chinese traditional culture,And Albert Einstein represents modern technologies.’Eating’ this cultural hotpot is very joyful,at the same time it is very useful for your self-improvemen

批改：内容写的不错，比较有新意，从一众模板中脱颖而出，但是一定要注意，如果自己想有新意，语法词汇一定要对，不然还不如背诵模板的

原文：ha

批改：前面加and

原文：e ca

批改：only放句首，部分倒装，can we

原文：,

批改：删掉逗号

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/20

语法：语法上注意句子成分不能丢，主谓宾，主系表，严格按照语法规则，文中出现多句 标点，大小写不规范的问题，简单句和复合句一定要注意区分，复合句一定要加连词，

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的，第二段很通顺。

词汇：单词整体还行，注意一些词汇使用的适当性哦。

内容：内容比较符合英文作文写作要求，结构合理。

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