考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2017年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一作文范文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man, sitting in a sofa and saying that we have many books. On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, the man says that we should read these books in this year. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that taking an action is the brush that paints a bright future, while only thinking is the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, taking an action nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, only thinking is like a heavy chain that hinders people progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life, and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, taking an action is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice; additional, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of only thinking to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the left-hand cartoon, there is a man, sitting in a sofa and saying that we have many books. On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, the man says that we should read these books in this year. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that taking an action is the brush that paints a bright future, while only thinking is the shackle that hinders progress.

批改： 你对两幅图画的描述简洁到位，并且用非常精彩的比喻句总结了图画寓意

原文： phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, taking an action nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, only thinking is like a heavy chain that hinders people progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life, and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

批改： 本段从正反两方面论证，结构清晰。特别是反面论证，“heavy chain”的比喻和“negative outlook”的后果都论述得非常有力。

原文：taking an action nurture o

批改：taking an action nurture” 存在主谓不一致的错误，动名词短语作主语时，谓语动词要用单数，应改为 “nurtures”。

原文：hinders peopl

批改：“hinders people progress” 中，应在 “people” 后加上所有格形式 “‘s”，即 “people‘s progress”。

原文：brief, taking an action is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice; additional, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of only thinking to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改： 结尾段总结有力，再次点明主题，并提出了明确的倡议，很好地收束了全文。“catalyst”和“detrimental”等高级词汇的运用也很准确。

原文：additional,

批改：“additional” 是形容词，这里需要副词来连接句子，应改为 “additionally”。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16分

总评：

你的文章具备了清晰的结构、准确的立意和出彩的亮点句。主要的提升空间在于语法的精确性

修改建议

攻克语法细节：主谓一致、名词所有格等看似小的语法点，往往是高分的关键。写完可以快速检查一遍，确保这些基础环节万无一失。

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