考研英语二2016年大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2016年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文话题写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of different purposes of college students" travel. Among all the purposes, enjoying the scenery and relieving stress accounted for the largest proportion, each taking up approximately one-third. other purposes, such as cultivating independence and making a wide range of friends, divide the remaining one-third of the proportion.

The reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summaried as following. First of all, enjoying beautiful scenery is undoubtedly one of the most significant reasons for most people, including college students, to go on a trip. Whether it is the majestic mountains and deep valleys in nature, or the dazzling neon lights of skyscrapers in cities, the distinct and anique landscapes in different regions always captivate the hearts of young people, who form majority of the college students. Besides, using travel to relieve stress has become an important choice for many college students who are burdened with heavy academic loads during their spare time. Coming to a completely new environment helps them alleviate the psychological fatigue.

In conclusion, with the advancement of society and the exponsion of transportation, traveling has become an distinctive part of university life. This is beneficial to both regional economy and the improvement of college students" abilities and perspectives.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：divide

批改：divided 注意时态保持一致，前面用的是过去时

原文：The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of different purposes of college students" travel. Among all the purposes, enjoying the scenery and relieving stress accounted for the largest proportion, each taking up approximately one-third. other purposes, such as cultivating independence and making a wide range of friends, divide the remaining one-third of the proportion.

批改：建议用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：summaried

批改：summarized

原文：anique

批改：unique

原文：The reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summaried as following. First of all, enjoying beautiful scenery is undoubtedly one of the most significant reasons for most people, including college students, to go on a trip. Whether it is the majestic mountains and deep valleys in nature, or the dazzling neon lights of skyscrapers in cities, the distinct and anique landscapes in different regions always captivate the hearts of young people, who form majority of the college students. Besides, using travel to relieve stress has become an important choice for many college students who are burdened with heavy academic loads during their spare time. Coming to a completely new environment helps them alleviate the psychological fatigue.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：exponsion

批改：expansion

原文：an

批改：a

原文：In conclusion, with the advancement of society and the exponsion of transportation, traveling has become an distinctive part of university life. This is beneficial to both regional economy and the improvement of college students" abilities and perspectives.

批改：总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

语法：语言表达和语法基础上，进步的空间还很大。有时间好好看看文中的批改，细心吸收，争取在接下来的练习中避免类似的错误。

首段总体概括图表主题，详细列出关键数据变化；第二段分析原因，可从社会就业压力增大、学生追求自我实现等方面进行论述；第三段评论与展望，预测未来趋势可能持续，并强调其对个人和社会发展的积极意义。

文章整体来说，言简意赅，符合了考试写作提纲的要求，文章表示语义衔接的词语运用不太多，在以后的写作中可以多尝试使用一些表示衔接的词语，这样文章段落内部句内和段落之间的关系就能很明朗的表现出来。同时注意避免单纯罗列数据，可适当引用社会现象或政策背景支持分析，增强说服力。

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