考研英语一2013年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2013年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一作文范文备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the picture, there are many graduators, standing on a special road which means the choices of lives, and considering which roads should they choose. Evidently, the cartoonist is intend to convey to us that the importance of planing in advance.

The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, in mordern society full of chances and challenge, planing in advance is a key factor that distinguishes excellent individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become significantly evident. On the other hand, neglecting planning is a shackle hinders adults’ progress leaving them with a negtive and ambiguous outlook on life, and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, clear future plan is a catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we fulfill our aspirations.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：graduators

批改：graduates

原文：should they

批改： they should

原文：intend

批改：intended

原文：that

批改：后面不是句子，把that去掉

原文：As shown in the picture, there are many graduators, standing on a special road which means the choices of lives, and considering which roads should they choose. Evidently, the cartoonist is intend to convey to us that the importance of planing in advance.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：challenge

批改：复数

批改：加that构成定语从句，否则这句话两个谓语

批改：加逗号断句

原文：negtive

批改：negative

原文：The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, in mordern society full of chances and challenge, planing in advance is a key factor that distinguishes excellent individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become significantly evident. On the other hand, neglecting planning is a shackle hinders adults’ progress leaving them with a negtive and ambiguous outlook on life, and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：In brief, clear future plan is a catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we fulfill our aspirations.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误，名词单复数要使用正确；句式和语法方面，注意一句话只能有一个谓语以及正确使用从句，还要注意正确使用标点断句。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

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