考研英语二2016年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2016年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二作文模板教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

Elaborately and luminously, this pie chart given above illustrates the percentage breakdown of the travel purposes of students from a certain university. Appreciating scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving stress at 33%. Additionally, factors such as cultivating independence, making friends, and others are also considered, accounting for 6%, 9% and 15% respectively.

Several factors could weigh heavily on this tendency,yet suspended at the top of the list are the following aspects.To begin with, against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development,the younger generation,particularly those born in the 2000s,face considerable stress in the competitive society compared with the millennial generation,so they tend to travel to relax themselves.Simultaneously,natural scenery can alleviate the negative mood of stressed students and maintain their mental health.Apart from the above-mentioned aspects, students can gain knowledge and expand horizons when enjoying the scenery,which is beneficial to their academic and career development.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately reflect the choice of Generation Z ,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Elaborately and luminously, this pie chart given above illustrates the percentage breakdown of the travel purposes of students from a certain university. Appreciating scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving stress at 33%. Additionally, factors such as cultivating independence, making friends, and others are also considered, accounting for 6%, 9% and 15% respectively.

批改：准确描述了图表内容

原文：weigh heavily on

批改：沉重压在……心头：指某种情感或问题对某人的心理或生活造成了沉重的负担或影响。

原文：,yet suspended at the top of the list are the following aspects

批改：表达冗余，with the primary drivers as follows

原文：Several factors could weigh heavily on this tendency,yet suspended at the top of the list are the following aspects.To begin with, against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development,the younger generation,particularly those born in the 2000s,face considerable stress in the competitive society compared with the millennial generation,so they tend to travel to relax themselves.Simultaneously,natural scenery can alleviate the negative mood of stressed students and maintain their mental health.Apart from the above-mentioned aspects, students can gain knowledge and expand horizons when enjoying the scenery,which is beneficial to their academic and career development.

批改：论据充分，词汇和句法丰富

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately reflect the choice of Generation Z ,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15分。

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，状语从句，伴随状语，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4. 文章原创度很高，很多句型和词汇都是自己写的，值得鼓励，把满分状态带到考场上，加油！

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