考研英语一2011年大作文实例分析与批改

备战2011年考研英语大作文，先从研读经典高分范文开始。本文汇集的启航教育批改范文中，不仅有原文、批注，还有词汇注释与亮点解析。准备2027考研的同学，可联系启航教育在线咨询考研英语一写作高分规划。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

The following drawing depicts such a shocking scene during travels: Two passengers on a wooden boat are reading and talking, during they throwing rabbish just into the water. In the lower part of the picture, there is a plenty of garbage fbating on the lake, almost covering the surface. Below the drawing, there is a phrase said: the waste of a trip.

The image showed an alarming social phenomenon that some travellers are lack of the awareness of environmental protection. They only care about their own convenience and ignore the ecotope of scenic areas. Similar behaviors also involve trampling on lawns and picking flowers. These behaviors not only damage the ecological environment, but also reduce the experience of following tourists. They must be effectively addvessed.

Firstly, in order to deal with the damage of these people, the scenic spot is supposed to clear the garbage as soon as possible and restore the environment for the other travellers. Secondly, the managers of the spot should post notices to prohibit such behaviors and ask the staff to supervise the tourists. Last and most important, as a visitor, we ought to follow the rules in seenic spots and protect the enviroment. Only in this way, we can make the scenery more attractive and durable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：rabbish

批改：rabbish”→“rubbish”（拼写错误，“垃圾” 正确拼写，考研基础词汇）

原文：a plenty of

批改：删去 “a”（“plenty of” 为固定搭配，后接可数 / 不可数名词，无需加冠词，考研搭配考点）

原文：covering the surface.

批改：建议：covering the entire surface.

原文：there is a phrase

批改：“there is a phrase said”→“is a caption that reads”（“漫画说明文字” 用 “caption”，“reads” 表 “标注”，考研固定表达）；

原文：are lack of

批改：“are lack of”→“lack”（“lack” 为及物动词，直接接宾语，“be lack of” 为错误表达，考研核心语法考点）；

原文：ecotope

批改：“ecotope”→“ecological environment”（“ecotope” 为专业术语，“生态环境” 用 “ecological environment” 更通用，考研词汇精准性）；

原文：involve

批改：involve”→“include”（“包括” 更直接，符合考研简洁表达原则）

原文：addvessed.

批改：“addvessed”→“addressed”（拼写错误，“解决” 正确拼写，考研基础词汇）

原文：he managers of the spot

批改：“the managers of the spot”→“managers of scenic spots”（复数表泛指，与前文一致，考研表达一致性）；

原文：post notices

批改：“post notices”→“put up notices”（“张贴通知” 考研地道搭配）；

原文：ask the staff

批改：“ask the staff”→“arrange staff”（“安排工作人员” 比 “要求工作人员” 更贴合管理场景，考研语义精准性）；

原文：seenic spots and protect the enviroment.

批改：“seenic”→“scenic”、“enviroment”→“environment”（拼写错误，考研基础词汇纠错）。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/20

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