考研英语一2017年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2017年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the loft-hand cartoon, there is a young man, sitting in a sofa and boasting that he owns a large number of books. On the contrary, in the right-hand partrayal, another young man is making a yearly plan of reading 20 books, with only a few books on his desk. Evidently, the cartoonist intend to convey to readers that down-to-eacth is the brush that paints a bright future, while daydreaming is the shackle the hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking is several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, down-to-earth can ignite our creativity and promote persomal growth and self-fulillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. Oo the other hand ,daydreaming is like a heavy chain that hinders our progress, learing our with a negative outlook on life and preventing our from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, down-to-earth is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, We should actively support and advocate the practice; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming ensure our growth stays course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：loft

批改：left

原文：intend

批改：intends 第三人称单数形式

原文：eacth

批改：earth

原文：the

批改：that

原文：In the loft-hand cartoon, there is a young man, sitting in a sofa and boasting that he owns a large number of books. On the contrary, in the right-hand partrayal, another young man is making a yearly plan of reading 20 books, with only a few books on his desk. Evidently, the cartoonist intend to convey to readers that down-to-eacth is the brush that paints a bright future, while daydreaming is the shackle the hinders progress.

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：persomal

批改：personal

原文：fulillment

批改：fulfillment

原文：Oo

批改：On

原文：learing our

批改：leaving us

原文：our

批改：us 用宾格形式

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking is several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, down-to-earth can ignite our creativity and promote persomal growth and self-fulillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. Oo the other hand ,daydreaming is like a heavy chain that hinders our progress, learing our with a negative outlook on life and preventing our from shining brightly in future society.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的重要性，逻辑严谨，层次分明。。

原文：ensure

批改：to ensure

原文：course

批改：on course

原文：n brief, down-to-earth is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, We should actively support and advocate the practice; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming ensure our growth stays course.

批改：联系自身，总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：第一段为传统的图画描述段，根据图画中的具体信息，尤其是下面的文字说明，进行直接描述。第二段以分论点的形式阐释图画寓意，强调行动比做白日梦更重要，逻辑严谨，层次分明。最后一段表明作者本人对这种现象的态度或看法，此评论部分可以提出建议，考虑背景及原因，或描述未来。

整体来看，作文理解了漫画内涵，段落框架明确，大体上与题目要求保持一致，但是在表达上还存在一定问题。从点评中可以看出作文中有一些表述不当之处，基本是由汉语思维习惯而造成的表达错误，主要体现在词汇使用和搭配不当，句子成分缺失混乱，同时也有一些时态和前后一致等细节问题，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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