2014年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

2014年考研英语二大作文是启航考研英语备考清单中的必练题型。本文带来的高分批改范例，配套启航教育老师的逐句批注与预测话题标签，适合考研英语考生在冲刺阶段精读精练，是一套完整的写作提升资料。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in populations of cities and countrysides in a period of 20 years.In 1990, the populations of city was 300 million, but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to 666 million. In contrast, the populations of countryside experienced a slow decline of 100 million during the same period.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system in cities, enabling villagers to have ample opportunities to find jobs in cities. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, villagers are no longer content with mere material satisfaction, they also pursue a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of them choose to live in cities. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of city"s population is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of countryside"s population will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： was

批改：were 注意主谓一致

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in populations of cities and countrysides in a period of 20 years.In 1990, the populations of city was 300 million, but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to 666 million. In contrast, the populations of countryside experienced a slow decline of 100 million during the same period.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system in cities, enabling villagers to have ample opportunities to find jobs in cities. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, villagers are no longer content with mere material satisfaction, they also pursue a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of them choose to live in cities. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the number of city"s population is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of countryside"s population will likely continue to decrease.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：首段简洁描述图表核心数据，突出城乡人口变化趋势。中间段分析变化原因，包括经济发展、城市基础设施优势等，同时指出城市化带来的问题。尾段提出政府应采取措施缓解城市化负面影响，体现对社会问题的关注。

整体来看，主要是细节错误，但要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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