考研英语一2016年大作文怎么写？附例文批改

面对2016年考研英语一大作文，许多同学最关心的是有没有可复制的写作模板。本文带来的高分范文严格遵循考研英语作文模板高分框架，从开头引入、主体论证到结尾呼应，全文清晰流畅，是考研英语考生的必备学习资料。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

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福十赢团全 请在各题目的答题区域内作答,超出答题区域的答案无效 Section I Writing Part B 52.

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man, lying in a sofa and saying to his son: "son, you should study hard." On the contrary, the right-hand cartoon, there is a man, sitting on the desk and studing hard with his son. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to covey to reader that positive influence is a brush that paints bright future, while negative attitute is a shacle that hinder progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways. Both of two are particularly significant. First and foremost, take a active action can inigite individual potencial and fulfll personal aspiration. What is more, negative attitute will lose confidence for life.

In brief, positive attitute is a catalyst for societal and personal development. Therefore, we should support and advocate this quality. Only by doing so we can develop ourselves and build a happier sociaty.

-请在各题目的答题区域

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the

批改：前加in

原文：on

批改：改成at，是坐在桌子旁不是桌子上

原文：studing

批改：studying

原文：covey

批改：convey

原文：reader

批改：复数

原文：attitute

批改：attitude

原文：shacle

批改：shackle

原文：hinder

批改：hinders

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man, lying in a sofa and saying to his son: "son, you should study hard." On the contrary, the right-hand cartoon, there is a man, sitting on the desk and studing hard with his son. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to covey to reader that positive influence is a brush that paints bright future, while negative attitute is a shacle that hinder progress.

批改：对图画中的细节描述的很全面，但是要避免小的语言问题。

原文：take

批改：taking动名词做主语

原文：potencial

批改：potential

原文：fulfll

批改：fulfill

原文：attitute

批改：

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways. Both of two are particularly significant. First and foremost, take a active action can inigite individual potencial and fulfll personal aspiration. What is more, negative attitute will lose confidence for life.

批改：论述内容较少，建议增加

原文：attitute

批改：

原文：sociaty

批改：society

原文：In brief, positive attitute is a catalyst for societal and personal development. Therefore, we should support and advocate this quality. Only by doing so we can develop ourselves and build a happier sociaty.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误以及正确使用介词；句式和语法方面，注意从句中谓语形式正确以及动名词做主语。逻辑结构清晰完整，能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好，中间段落论述内容有些少，建议增加一些。继续加油。

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