考研英语一2013年大作文失分点批改

本文整理了2013年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语作文真题范文的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

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51. As shown in the cartoon, there are many people, standing the road of life choose and including find a job, attend to the postgraduate examination, go to abroad, and create a position for myself to be a boss. Evidently, the cartoonist intend to convey to reader that chosen plays a positive role both our individual life and in society.

This phenomenon can be summarized as follows, to start with, in modern society full of changes, chancer, challenges, choice has become a key factor that distinguishes indinal exceptional individua from ordinary people, its significance has become increasingly evident. In addition, graduate"s choice has a significant role for our country, as it serves as crucial cornerstone for boosting overall natvonal strength.

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In brief, good choice can promote personal life and society development, so we should support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so we can develop individual potencial and create a harmanier society.

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文： the road of life choose and

批改：standing at a crossroads in life, making choices

原文： find a job, attend to the postgraduate examination, go to abroad, and create a position for myself to be a boss.

批改：用动名词结构finding jobs, preparing for postgraduate exams, studying abroad, or starting their own businesses

原文：chosen

批改： making a good choice 改为动名词

原文：our

批改：加in

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there are many people, standing the road of life choose and including find a job, attend to the postgraduate examination, go to abroad, and create a position for myself to be a boss. Evidently, the cartoonist intend to convey to reader that chosen plays a positive role both our individual life and in society.

批改：注意语言的准确性

原文：, to

批改：句号，后面首字母大写

原文： chancer

批改：chances

原文：indinal

批改：删除

原文：individua

批改：individuals

原文：,

批改：加and或者句号或者用分号

原文：has a significant role for

批改：play a pivotal role in

原文： crucial

批改：前面加a

原文：This phenomenon can be summarized as follows, to start with, in modern society full of changes, chancer, challenges, choice has become a key factor that distinguishes indinal exceptional individua from ordinary people, its significance has become increasingly evident. In addition, graduate"s choice has a significant role for our country, as it serves as crucial cornerstone for boosting overall natvonal strength.

批改：论点清晰，注意拼写和语法

原文：, choice

批改：making a good choice 改为动名词

原文：choice

批改：复数，不止一个选择

原文：good choice

批改：making a good choice 改为动名词

原文：life

批改：growth

原文：harmanier

批改：a more harmonious

原文：In brief, good choice can promote personal life and society development, so we should support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so we can develop individual potencial and create a harmanier society.

批改：提出倡议，呼应主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/20分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，但是语法和拼写错误很明显，影响了分数；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，状语从句和宾语从句句型很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行文流畅，内容连贯；

4. 建议：要深刻吃透老师的模板，使用自己的语言，灵活运用在各类题目中，同时要提高引用的准确率，加油！

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