2011年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二作文模板教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart displays the percentage breakdown of the market shares of some brands in the domestic car market. In 2008, Japanese brand takes the lead at 35%, followed by domestic brand at 25%, and the smallest proportion is the American brand which is at 12%. In 2009, domestic brand takes the lead at 32%, followed by Japanese brand at 25%, the last one is also American brand at 11%.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of the reform and opening-up, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of populace, allowing them to effort automobiles that were previously deemed luxury Japanese brand items. In addition, with the high-speed development of society, the automotive industry in China has made significant progress, capable of producing high-quality and affordable vehicles that have become the main consumption brands for Chinese people. As a result, the market share of Japanese brands in China has declined.

What abouts future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of Chinese people, serving as a microcosm of changes in the era, and will remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The bar chart displays the percentage breakdown of the market shares of some brands in the domestic car market. In 2008, Japanese brand takes the lead at 35%, followed by domestic brand at 25%, and the smallest proportion is the American brand which is at 12%. In 2009, domestic brand takes the lead at 32%, followed by Japanese brand at 25%, the last one is also American brand at 11%.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：effort

批改：afford

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of the reform and opening-up, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of populace, allowing them to effort automobiles that were previously deemed luxury Japanese brand items. In addition, with the high-speed development of society, the automotive industry in China has made significant progress, capable of producing high-quality and affordable vehicles that have become the main consumption brands for Chinese people. As a result, the market share of Japanese brands in China has declined.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：What abouts future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of Chinese people, serving as a microcosm of changes in the era, and will remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，注意区分形近单词；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬，再接再厉。

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